wow! i luved it! its very detailed and it is sad but i cant wait to see what happends next!

Very nice intriguing beginning. Good and detailed, but not overly so. For your first sad story, this is excellent;) I'll definitely be looking for later chapters, update soon!

This is pretty good so far. I s Hige, Kiba, Tsume, and Cheza going to be in this? update soon

Interesting!