Lovely.

"A straight line stays a straight line forever," River says earnestly. "Unless you go out of your way. You only have to ask."
I had to go back for this to make sense. I thought she was talking about the maths of shooting, but now I see that it could mean something else. Nice.

I love your story! It's so artistic and beautiful. I wrote a sequel to it because I adore it so much.. I hope you don't mind. ^_^

Hiya, I love this work- it's a fantastic story and I think you captured River's voice perfectly. Keep up the amazing work.

xLisa