Once again, I've converted to my Ragnarok obsession. Looked under "Angst" and found this one. And...

I LIKE IT! :D! Fenris' thoughts in a whole new view! The dark side of Fenris. Desparation, anger, hurt...

I LOVE the ending. Wasn't expecting it. It's like a minor cliffhanger, since we the readers can only use our imagination to figure out why this all happened this way...

sigh Poor Fenris...

Very nice. It really is very Fenris to think of things like that. I especially like how you've written it out that to love Chaos in her shoes is a very painful thing indeed. (sigh). I'd say you've done a good job in this story of yours :)

hello...so wow...

i think you should continue this. it's got potential turning into a good lokixfenris fiction. like you've said, there are quite a number of grammical errors but that can be worked. note your tenses and such, but i would say, overall, its good.

-sb

:O I love it!

Actually, the snytax ang grammar are great! And so is spelling. :D Very few, if any, mistakes!

I liked the story. I liked the way you portrayed Fenris.

And the angst! It was great.

I like your writing style. It seems-uncluttered.

All in all, I like your story and will be putting it in my faves list.

You're a good writer. I only wish i could write like that.

-teh jj -