Reviews for Death to the MarySue

Reviews For: Death to the MarySue

InuAce 2005-11-06 ch 1,	abuseI love you! ^_^ you're so cool! Death to all mary-sue's (except for a select few) mumbles name of her friend GoodMorningBeautiful2005. hehehe, I like it.
Hawkeye116 2005-07-19 ch 1,	abuseVery nice, another Sue-bashing story! Huzzah! Wonderfully sarcastic and funny. You should continue this.
Weiila 2005-07-18 ch 1,	abuseWohoo! We need more Mary Sue parodies to fight back the black tide! Wonderful. :) You write a nice, quirky story with a humorous conclusion, but I notice a few irritating errors that disturb the flow. For example, in this paragraph: "A look of disgust passed, and remained on the young kings face. The lip curled up, an eyebrow twitched, and the nose wrinkled. With teeth barred in disgust, crystalline blue eyes went wide with a thought. the disgust turned into reckless joy." The word "digust" appears three times in one paragraph, which gets rather repetive. Also, there should be a capital T at the start of the last sentence. Might be nitpicky, but there are similar things here and there. Just look that over and this'll just be fabulous XD
random baka 2005-07-17 ch 1, anon.	abuseVery cool, but I gotta admit that not all of 'em Mary-Sues are bad. I've read a few good ones before, never in the Jak category tho'. Heh, when you wrote that Jak was gonna give 'em what they wanted I thought he'd get trigger happy if you know what I mean. Lol. Very funny fic! See you next time!
Beastfire 2005-07-15 ch 1,	abuseAnother anti-Sue story! WAY better than a pro-Sue story! MARY SUES MUST DIE! Ivy: whips out a sword YEAH! sword starts to glow blue, as do her eyes Let's go kick some Mary Sue carcass... Beastfire: Update soon! This is really great!
Lady Nxy 2005-07-15 ch 1,	abuseLol. Good story. Like the ending. Jak handled the situation quite well. I've never actually read any of the "Im sucked into the game" stories but from all the Mary Sue stories Ive read criticizing them I can see why people don't like them. They seem to overide everyone else. Anyway, awesome story and hope to see more of your work.
Scarabbug 2005-07-15 ch 1,	abuseYes! Gotta love well written Mary Sue parody's, funny idea this, and quite enjoyable. Though it might be an idea to put a note saying you don't intend to insult the writer's of the self inserts. They're a pain, it's true, but, all the same... a little decorum never went a miss. It's all in good jest. I love the way they appear totally randomly in all the ways that they have a tendency to appear, and thiss ection is certainly getting overrun with Mary Sue's. And I think that the characters would use verbal contractions ("it's" instead of "it is", for example.) You get Ashelin to call Jak "Mar" once. Does she call him this when she's anxious or unsure in canon? If it doesn't, better change it to Jak. Apart from this, funny and rather entertaining. It certainly got me giggling. Scarab.
EyesLikeSilk 2005-07-15 ch 1,	abuseYES. Mary Sues are teh' evil. Hehe... Poor Jak... lost his goggles... yes for 1 2: She's a variety of unbelievable self-inserts that usually end up upstaging the rest of the characters and sueifying them into saps. Often she literally pops in from earth, has a long description of her clothing, a painful origin story, and ends up with Jak. She either steals the plot, goes man-hunting, sacrifices herself, overshadows other formerly important side-characters, or all of the above and more.
Meowen 2005-07-15 ch 1,	abuseMary-sues are freks, that's true. I'm actually working a little in my backhead over a story with a Marysue as enemy. But that's later. Right now, I'm gonna enjoy this story once more. The way they take care of the enemy is VERY smart. Keep writing more such stuff!
yes for 1 2 2005-07-15 ch 1, anon.	abuseEMILY- Something has been bothering me ever since I joined and now I just have to say it. WHAT THE IS A MARY SUE? IT'S ALL MARY SUE THIS, MARY SUE THAT. WHAT THE IS IT? explodes
shadows-of-flame 2005-07-15 ch 1,	abuse...Very well written. Very. XD And I feel sorry for Jak, hje has to put up with so many self inserts...
Dar Kash Elin 2005-07-14 ch 1,	abuseAh yes... another 'Die MarySue!!' kind of story. I love these. There should be a catagory specifically for MarySues and GaryStus(although these are rare) that sorts them out so I don't have to look at them and feel a disgusted feeling in the pit of my stomach everytime I check for updates in the J&D section of fics. Then there should be a catagory that is against MSs and GTs. This was very good. favoritized Very few errors in this... and I think it deserves to be continued. Or a sequel. Whatever floats your boat. Myes... fangirls dying by the claws of metalheads. Such a happy ending, it brings a tear to my eye. ;D Excellente!

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