I LOVE the story. Its a really good idea! I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT! *Cries* Keep writing! :)

intense.

PLEASE DON"T STOP WRITING THIS! I got to the last chapter and I was about ready to yell at my computer," Why? NO! Don't stop! It was justing getting so good!" Please don't stop writing this series! And if your dragon has been eating up your ideas for this story he is going to have to deal with me!

Write more, Write more, Write more. I just love this story and cannot wait for you to update. I have read this Story a few times and never got around to reviewing it and for that I'm sorry. But anyway you have done an awsome job on this story so far and has made the suspence really high. Good Job keep up the good work.

Cool story, what the heck is up with those blue creatures anyway? update! Please!

Please wright more it was getting interesting

The blue creatures are the ones from the Supernaturalists, aren't they? The Unspec 4 (can't remember what the SN call 'em), and because they take the pain and make you feel calmer, that's why the Metalhead didn't do anything while it was dying.

Its been a while since you updated this story. I've waited forever! Still, great chapter! I love how you set up Jak's prison! Made it look like he was in a mental facility instead of a jail cell! Impressive!

So... Trish has died, Jak's imprisoned, Torn and Daxter are both stuck in a hospital and Ashelin is loaded with paperwork/bomb mysteries... Now who is going to rescue the Hero?! Or will he die from Dark Eco exposure? I really hope he doesn't!

I also like the joke you made Torn say when Daxter asked him why he was in the hospital. Very amusing! Why doesn't Daxter get Torn is being sarcastic, when he himself is always making ironic comments and stuff? Maybe its because Torn always acts so serious all the time! The guy has to lighten up a bit! Anyways, great chapter! Plase update really soon!

Man, I nearly forgot what happened in this story. It's still great, and I can't wait for you to update.

Okay. This is... well, the idea is still good, but you NEED a beta reader. You're becoming increasingly incoherent. I read it, of course. I still like it. But almost every sentence is a run-on, and the grammar is ocasionally iffy. The spelling is perfect, though, except once, when you said the metal was wielded to Torn's shoulder. It should say welded. Or at least I think so.

The grammatical errors were to numerous to point out, in fact. Almost every sentence. I really think you NEED A BETA. Or at the VERY LEAST, look over your drafts yourself, AND spell-check. Seriously, both are needed (at LEAST), and a beta is often a necessary addition. MS Word won't catch everything, and nor will you, but most of the errors I found could be easily spotted even by the worst programs available. If you already have a spell-check, be sure it checks grammar, too. Yes, I know, sometimes you need to ignore it-- certain times, sentence fragments are a valid literary tool ("Wham! It hit him. Just like that.") and I don't deny that-- but mainly it knows what it's talking about. Following its advice will almost never result in incorrect grammar or spelling. (Except, for instance, in Final Fantasy stories where it corrects "Materia" or, in this fandom, if it tries to correct "Jak" to "Jack" and "Daxter" to "Dexter". But aside from the fandom-specific...)

Let me again say, since my anal corrections might have indicated otherwise, that I LOVE IT. That was a long wait, but it was definitely worth it. I was worried this fic might be dead, and that would be a real shame! It's awesome.

I think everyone got bitten by the writing bug. I've seen a lot of stories resurrected recently. Kudos to you for doing so. I imagine it must be tough getting back into the groove.

Excellent chapter, as always. Very character-development oriented. You're keeping the pace well, with maybe just a bit of rushing towards the end. But nice job, overall, and as I get back in the groove the reviews will get more in-depth. I eagerly await the next installment.

~Chantz

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THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR UPDATING YOUR WONDEROUS STORY!

Hey, it's great to have you back. And it's great to see that you're updating this story again! Great job on it! Keep up the good work. And if you lose your way again, find your way back.

OH MY GOD!! I READ YOU WERE GUNNA FINISH ALL YOUR STORIES! does that mean this one too?

i really love this story! please please continue!!

Jak better get out o I know have jak send Torn mental images and then make Torn convice the others that he's not crazy then they all go after him then dark jaks spirit comes to help the gang find jak maybe dark jak should take control of Torn's body.