Wow this was one of the best stories I've read in a while, I love the ending, though I think I clicked the review button on the first chapter... oops? well I'm reviewing on the whole story!
Whatever, this was awesome, like seriously you ended it perfectly and it was one of the first fics I've read in a long time thats held my attention truly. This is like the fifth time I've read the story, though I used to go by a different account, so this technically is the first time I've read it completely on this account... okay wow im a stickler for details... _; uhm anyways seriously this was awesome! I think the story just came together perfectly and jeez does tai sound hot! XD lol
This story was awesome (sorry for my repetitiveness but awesome is like my favorite word next to potato... uhm don't ask), and I really loved the story! Keep writing! _ !
Etemon Luver 11/15/08 . chapter 10
I love this story so much I wish you would continue it! 'Black Clouds' and 'Holding On' are VERY well written. I wish to see more of this kind of work from you. So I ask, would you please write an epilogue or something for this series? You left off too soon for my taste, but that is the only sour part about these stories.
The are cheerful, tearbringing, heartwarming and I would LOVE to read more. So would you please continue?
That was amazing! The sex, I mean, lol! Very graphical.
Hm... I think the story is good, too carried away by the emotions to point out the strong points as well as the weak points of the story, but I'll try my best. (I'm reviewing, duh, so that's what I'm going to do, no matter how overwhelmed I am at the moment)
The emotions were depicted clearly as well as the sceneries, situations, and occurrences of certain events. My main criteria is realism, and if I am to grade it, I would have rated it 8/10. I would have graded it 10, however I think that there's no way that a life would be so perfect as that. Well, no one of us can perfectly picture out how the real world really works, but in my humble opinion, I think it's not realistic enough. Take the confrontation with Sebs for example. No matter how enraged you are, I believe there is no way he can beat Sebs and his followers, but, I don't know how you pictured it, but that's just what I believe.
However, your story is quite unique and if I follow it from the Black Clouds, it would definitely be a perfect sequel. So, I changed it to 9/10.
Why only 9? Because, I prefer a stand alone sequel than a dependent one. What does it mean? Well put it this way, pretend you haven't read Black Clouds, and read this story. It would get pretty confusing right from the start. It had been 2 days since I last read Black Clouds (and I already forgot it, then I stumbled on its sequel today) I was totally confused how did he have the claustrophobia, so I Have to reread the Black Clouds again. But I think it's not a big deal. It is a sequel after all.
Well, I haven't really witnessed a real case of claustrophobia, but if its what I read, then I am willing to say, you have described it pretty well, as well as Matt's reaction which is quite true to his characterization in the previous story (Black clouds)
From reading the story, and then the sequel, I noticed a dramatic change among the characters, especially Tai and Matt. Tai had gained some sort of intelligence and maturity, which is a good thing for the story. It brought out his 'seme' attitude and made their relationship endure.
As for Matt, he became clingy, whiny and frail, which for me is a bad thing, but good for the story. I just cant stand picturing him, crying and all, it's pathetic, be a man Matt! But I guess it's understandable, From the shock and trauma I mean, and from what he had experienced.
The way Sebs is disposed of is kind of short, abrupt and uhmm... how to say it? Well, it looks like he wasn't being made a fuss with. I mean, it looks like just like that, and, he's out of the picture. I mean he's not an important, or maybe he's important, and I know the importance of getting rid of him but shouldn't you create a small scene about him? How they got rid of him, a court, some thing of that sort? Well it's just a suggestion, But I guess the story is ok in its own way.
The ending is kind of sappy, no offense. It's sort of like a fairy tale. But I guess that from what they have gone through, I think they deserve it, at least that much. Well, I'm rambling here, as I said, the rush of emotion had impaired my 'honest judgment' and due to that nice, hot scene you gave, I'm going ot give this 10/10! Excellent piece of work!
You have to be one of the best authors out there, because your storys are just so great. I really hope you do another tai x matt fic. This story was just as good as black clouds.
Hey, I really love this story. It's awesome how you can make it so intersting. Hey maybe you could check out my story? I just started, so please reveiw! Anything will be better than nothing. Although i fully support Taito, in fact i absolutly love it, I havent written a story about them together...yet. I am planning on it though. So please read my story call 'Keeping Faith'. Althoug its mostly about Matt and my own characters...Oh well! Thank you! Great Job!
OH! OH OH OH OH OH OH OH! I CAN'T TAKE IT ANYMORE! That was good, but in a really, really BAD sort of way! Argh, I am SO ready to kill Seb. That boy is getting beat by me. He'd better watch his back, that fcking asshole. *growls and throws sharp objects towards said asshole* Die!
Good chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next!
Nice. Very nice. This story is so fun to read, and extremely well written. The plot's great, too. Sicne it's finished already, I really don't know what else to say. Will continue to read now.
Now I really want to know what's going to happen. I hope my Yama-chan doesn't go and do something stupid, like hurting himself or anything. *sighs* He really is hopeless without my Tai-kun there...
This fanfic is fantastique! I love Taito more than anything and that fanfic is one of the best that I have read and You do a really good work whit the lemon scene,Yummy! And I can deny that I love the Yama-chan who cry like a baby every time, but I love more when he kick Seb ass! And Taichi is so sweet, caring and strong at same time! and this made a such sweet couple...
Ps: I hate the personnage of Seb, Yama-chan do a very good work!
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