formating is fine. it's a style. paragraphs are divided to different parts of the fic. Might want to check out the characters names in fifth paragraph from the bottom. confusing when characters names are real words. (not/nott)
lovely story, by the way. written very well. style, interesting. word usage is original, i believe. ooc: limited.
didn't like the "my name is blaise" part. didn't seem subtle enough. didn't tie in with the rest of the story. could have given that info out better. but hey, it's your story.