Okay, I didn't expect the Sister. That was very cool and very clever. I like how you left it a little open ended. Planning a sequel, are we?

This is such a great mystery! I kind of hope chapter four is the last, because if it isn't then I'll have to wait to find out who dunnit. I had trouble unserstanding some of the technical jargon you used in your other Startshield story (probably because I've never read the book), but not in this one. Either you're using less, or you're explaining it better. I don't know which.

Ohh! More intrigue. I LOVE intrigue. This is a great story. I'm really enjoying it. And I'm SO CUNFUSED! I hope I won't be by the end of the next chapter!

Cool! I still haven't gotten to read the original book, but I'm really enjoying this story. Of course that could be because I always love a good mystery. Whenever you write, it's always very easy for me to picture everything in my mind. That's not always easy for me to do because I don't have a great visual memory.

On to the next chapter!