Obviously this story is already complete, so any comments of mine have to be viewed from that perspective.

I like your writing style. It's mature and complex, and I already know, after just one chapter that I will be reading this through to the end.

Now..this is just a personal point of mine, but I don't really care for seeing the Golden Trio (or any Ministry / Order personnel for that matter) threatening the Dursleys, especially in their own home.

Part of the way I read a fan-fic is to absorb a paragraph or two, then visualize it in my own mind. How would any of us like it if some seventeen year old arrived on our doorstep, shoved a weapon into our faces and told us that they were *going* to be staying in our our homes?

They may be repulsive and repugnant, with no redeeming qualities of their own. They may be small minded, jealous, petty, greedy and flat out poor examples of humanity but Number Four, Privet Drive is the Dursley residence. They have the right to make some decisions about how things go on there.

Please pay more attention to the first part of this commentary, regarding your overall writing style. It's not my way to flame anyone. I thank you for sharing your vision with us all.

I liked a lot of your stylistic choices but the story just felt too straight forward by the end.

I really enjoyed the style you wrote this in. It reads like canon but the plot is uniquely yours. the vast majority of fics leave me irritated because of random tense errors or because the plot is overused. Your fic is one of the few stories I can read on this site without cringing and having to ignore little errors.

your battle scene was completely unrealistic. and afterwards... i mean, wtf?? he stepped out carrying voldiepoops body and all he gets is a "congrats, you whupped voldies smelly arse."

and nothing even happened to him. even the ** duel in DH was better. Some verbal sparring, some crucial events... and then the final killing. though the whole beheading him thing was cool.

you do know Regulus Arcturus Black is R.A.B?? there were so many clues... like how the initials changed to R.A.S in the Dutch book where 'Black' is 'Svaarts' and R.A.Z in some book where again 'Black' began with a 'Z'.

Very good story - thought the final confrontation was a bit quick. But otherwise a good read.

hey! this is the first review ive posted on this site, and i have to say you deserve it! im not really into book 7 stories (unless they are AU of HBP) but this one was really good! im gonna go check out some of your other stories now,

thanks for a great couple of days reading.
merlin135

great story!

I just finished the story, and I liked it. I think the ending was a bit rushed. Maybe you coulda thrown in a chapter a couple years in the future about them married or w/e. But it was a very nice story, and I feel like the background plot was great

Thanks for a great story! The only possible improvement I could suggest is the most difficult thing for even professional, published writers to do and that is to incorporate more of the background, explanations, etc. into a dialog form between the characters that is both in character and sounds (or rather, reads) like a logical conversation. J.K. is, in my opinion, particularly brilliant at this. You have a lot of talent; I hope you continue to write.

Its really a nice story... I liked reading it.

Poornima.

heyy
ur story id fantastic.
but can u tell me wht happnd to Lord Voldemort's body.
wht did moody decide to do wid it.
thnx

AWESOME story!

This is a really good story. One of the best year seven fics i've read so far. The last few chapters have been good although i was sad when Charlie died. Only um... I've never heard of there being snow on the ground in England in February. If there is snow it normally melts as soon as it hits the ground.

Good story...but you need to work on your syntax.