Reviews for Of Lead and Silver, Second Draft

Reviews For: Of Lead and Silver, Second Draft

Call Me Camille 2005-08-13 ch 4, anon.	abuseCliffhanger! Not fair! Lovely story. She actually has a personality, as opposed to being some "tragic beauty" with some obscure "dark past." I like her, she's neat.
avid 2005-08-11 ch 3, anon.	abusehm, is it a bit unnerving that the author of this story only has a vague idea of what's going on? not really. i still can't spell easy words write (i swear on my life that i really unconsciously spelled "right" the wrong way. plus, that's not one of the words i usually mispell.) tell me, doesn't this look like it's spelled right: tounge. would you guess that the REAL spelling "tongue"? i didn't! i hate that word! blah, excuse my rambling...good job improving the story! :D (i feel somewhat hyper yet i didn't even have any sweets today, except a few semi-sweet nestle tollhouse chocolate chips b/c we honestly don't have any sweets here. wanna send me some lovely lovely cheesecake?)
Bananas in Pajamas 2005-08-04 ch 2,	abuseOnce on the lips, forever on the hips baby. Be careful with that cheesecake. One thing you might want to look at was you used "full of all the righteous wrath of a thunderstorm" twice near each other. You may want to substitute one out for something different. Other than that - lovely. Absolutely marvelous. I remain, Your Obedient Reviewer, Kipper
Bananas in Pajamas 2005-08-04 ch 1,	abuseOh! I am beside myself, dear authoress. This was, however, an eloquent and delightfully conversational chapter. I remain, Your Obedient Reviewer, Kipper
avid 2005-07-26 ch 1, anon.	abusea good start...i can see where you improved, and it's a lot clearer (well, i actually know what's going on too...)
Priestess of Anubis 2005-07-20 ch 1,	abuseI am intrigued, and wish to read more soon.
ahomelesspirate 2005-07-19 ch 1,	abusewell, I liked the first version, but I liked the second better. I hope you and Carlos have good luck.

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