"You're the one I rely on not to be a complete ** wit. So stop being a ** wit." *LAUGHS*

This was so poetically written, and the characters were represented well. I don't rightly have any critique, except perhaps describing Sanzo and Hakkai's appearances a bit better. Otherwise, it was fabulous!

Anyrate, do you usually write shounen-ai? There's this original-character roleplay forum dedicated to the genre. It's called Novena Academy, and is just starting up-- so it could definitely use some more recruits. Here's the link if you're interested:

http://w.novena-academy.

You should check it out; I think it'd be cool seeing more enthusiastic shounen-ai writers there. ^_^

Yay =) V. nice.

Oh the undertow! i like. ^_^ - zan