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I absolutely love your story! But I see that you have not updated in a while...that was have to be fixed because I am now entirely hooked! And yes, it is all about me (I have a shirt to prove it!) Ahem...anyway, I really like the way you saved Snape's reputation from J.K.R. I liked reading about him that way, so bravo! Anyway once again, UPDATE your fabulously amazing story SOON!
~Lady Kiren

Aw I was getting all excited about it too :(

You, my fellow author, are quite the lucky writer. I do not log in much for reviews lately. Usually I just enjoy the occasional story and don't bother to comment. But, because I like what you're doing with this and because my muse is finally back (when it goes on vacation, I lose the energy to even REVIEW a good story, much less WRITE one), I am going to leave you a few comments.

Your grammar is impeccable and I like the characterizations. I have yet to see what you do with Snape and I'm hoping that you keep him to canon--unpleasant, snarky, sarcastic, cynical, cold.

I like what you have going. When I finished Half-Blood Prince on the first day that I got it at 1 AM I remember crying, a lot for Dumbledore and a lot for the fact that my favorite character--Snape--had been guilty all along and that all my beliefs were crushed.

Then I consoled myself with several things. First of all, I am a WIKTT member (When I Kissed The Teacher) and I consoled myself by discussing wild theories all over the internet and on forums and eventually came to much the same conclusion as you have, assuming that your beliefs are this plotline.

I am enjoying all the new story fodder and ideas, as the original ones were getting rather cliched. At least now we have some more plots to cliche and twist and more epic fanfiction stories to watch emerge from all these new turns.

I would hope that the chapters are going to lengthen as we move along in the story, as they're rather short now. I wonder how long Minerva will play a role in this and if Harry or Ron will come along with Hermione in the journey that she is no doubt going to have to go on.

I scent foreshadowing in the fact that Hermione has access to all of Severus's books and his wards as well. I scent MORE foreshadowing in Portrait!Dumbledore's facial expressions when Hermione expresses her most obvious "answer" as to why she has access to Snape's chambers and books.

I hope my review has given you some food as a writer. I'll be tracking your progress.

Happy Writings,
Pen Against Sword

ok, some explanation, it is enough!
I don't mind which direction you proceed, as long as you do proceed at all. Maybe the memories Severus-Albus can be a one-shot lightly associated to this story. then you can omit who watches when... just tell here that they are lreated.
But this story has been sleeping for months --> PLEASE:
If you feel like abandoning stories it would be nice to add this fact to their summary or .. well, just somewhere.

a bit straight forward, this chapter, but probably you simply needed to have things said.
Let's see the next then.
When will Hermione see why she was allowed to enter?
I'm a bit irritated that Albus would visit Minderva's chambers. If that was so, why didn't he ask for Hermione earlier?

oh oh, how much time has been wasted?
this is a very good opening, looking forward t more chapters!

Oh, I absolutely love this fic. I don't usually read post-HBP fics (since you know...that's JK's job) but this is really well-written and interesting. Please update soon!

Just letting you know I am angtiously waiting on your next chapter. (and I know I did not spell that right)Humanity says you have been sick and I hope you are feeling better. I see you started a new labrinth story and I hope you don't forget about us waiting on the next installment here. Though, I wanted to let you know I saw the coolest post card today of Jarrod, at Hot Topics. I don't know if you have that store near you or not, but they have a website. Anyway back to the subject, I really really hope your feeling better. Good enough to write, but not so good that you want to role play. I'm hoping to read some more chapters on Marcellus and Snape before you still Humanity away from us again for more RPG. so please please please update soon...

I like what you've done with this story so far. Your level of detail and complex characterizations are something I highly enjoy and I look forward to reading the rest of the story. It's been a couple of months since you posted the Author's Note about having two versions of the next chapter and I don't know if it's too late to contribute to your choice, but I'm a fan of more detail intensive stories, so, I personally, would be interested in the more detailed, in-depth version of the story where we see the memories in the pensive and not just get them told to us later in the story as supporting fact. This also avoids the aspects of what's called "Unreliable Narrator" because viewpoint characters are not omniscient and omnipresent, and have biases that effect how they see something. It also falls under the writing rule called "Show don't tell" although I'm of the school of writers that acknowledge that sometimes telling is the way you have to go because the showing is sometimes too awkward to actually work right for the given story and it's internal action and character viewpoint. I hope your schedule and muse will allow you to write and post more chapters sometime soon cause I can't *wait* to find out what happens next. Keep up the good work. Zafaran zafaran@fastmail.fm

Wonderful story! I'm not usually a fan of HG/SS fics (HG/DM are more my thing) but this is really well written and great to read. I've been trying to convince my friends of just this Snape-is-good-Dumbledore-made-him-do-it possibility, and I sincerely hope it's what JKR has planned (though I won't hold my breath!). Most fics I've read so far are all dialogue and spelling mistakes, so thank you for a well-rounded and in-character narrative.
P.S. My vote goes to the longer penseive memories version for the next chapter. But it's up to you!

Ok, I need everyone to consintrait with me. Let's all cross our fingers and pray, "All role playing websites will crash today, all role playing websites will crash today."

You people are driving me crazy, you, Humanity and Amishgirl. I read your stories, get drawn in, and then you leave me hanging. Damn RPG!

I really like what you have done so far, and I hope you will update soon. (I like the idea of carrying on without the memories, if your just going to include it later.)I never thought I would be so taken with the HP fan fic world, but since I have begun reading you three ladies work, Professor Severus Snape has begun to haunt my dreams. ( I wake up with a smile every morning!)

Hm! Snape doesn't mind Hermoine in his rooms, I wonder why?

You make some good points in this first chapter. I too think that Harry in a Hocrux. I see you've only got three chapters so far, so I hope you update quickly.

Maybe if you and Christie quit playing that danged ole role play then I could read more of you and she would have time to update "Road", please. pretty please.

Hm the longer version or the shorter. I say the longer one even though I read it all in the book I'm sure you will have some different takes on stuff so that will be interesting to see. But if you prefer to be lazy and not write as much that will be fine with me too. So whatever way you go will be fine with me. Ttyl

Lyndsay

o!!it was sobeautiful!