took me a while to finish this story, but it was awesome. i love this Lily, she is so strong, phisically and metally. loved the story!

That was so amazing! I loved how you added that she saved the world at the end- I had never thought about it that way. You are so talented! keep writing!

This is awesome! I really like that you made Lily not really have a choice and how she and snape are so alike! You have awesome imagery and a way with wording! Can't wait to read the rest!

YAY dedicated to me!!

THIS IS SO NOT A LONG CHAPTER

I really love this story; I've so far been addicted. However, there is something that has been bugging me. Lily is strong true, but you are making her too strong. It seems as though you are making her perfect, with only Dumbledore and Voldemort above her. I find that this is a poor way to develop a character. You should have had James and Sirius better at her at some things: While she's amazing at Magic, they could have been better athletes. But, I love how the story is so far. Good job!

Hey I realy really really liked your story--AMAZING! lol anywa i relly dont kno wat 2 say 2 improve it...u kno wer u change scenes? it would help if der ws like a line dat told wer it ws...but anyway it ws pretty obvious & i really <3 it :) thx alot

OMG i just realised that Tonks is talking to Remus who she will one day hav a kid with! im screaming right now, thats so trippy :D

This is just the beginning of many reviews. Please do not take anyhting personally because I really like your story I just think everyone could enjoy some constructive criticism now and then...
The first chapter is a really great introduction. The first paragraph really hooked the reader. I would though make sure there are no sentence fragments and that every sentence has a past tense verb...I loved the first line.
Other than that it was a super introduction to hopefully interesting future plot...the action verbs were also especially nice because it makes you sound more powerful rather than using adverbs
love her name as well, and the dialogue really furthured the story line rather than just be placed there
Great chapter
can't wait to read more...

that...that..that was beautiful. It was gorgeous, heartwarming, mysteriuos and sad. Shh! I sorta feel sorry for Lord Voldemort. Haha GO LILY EVANS!

i really loved that!!

NO!NO! NO NO NO! the story CAN NOT end that way. NO! rewrite a different ending...PLEASE!! rewrite it...it is now like required of you! anyone who agres...Copy and paste this into ur profile nd review with a link to it...


YOU,CYLOBABY, ARE TO REWRITE A DIFFERENT ENDING FOR YOUR STORY, LADY VELISNA. IF YOU FAIL TO DO THIS...A CLUB OF ANGRY REVIEWERS WILL BE AT YOUR DOORSTEP WITH PITCHFORKS AND TORCHES...WE WARN YOU NOW...
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AW...i really do like it

AW so cute

uh oh