That was definetly an eyecatching start. Can't wait to read the next part!

The Littlest Dibbun

freaky, but good

Awesome. I too love Redwall. Did you created these charecters because I can't remember them? If you did that is really cool. Can't wait to read more. Keep up the good work.

Very good beginning, Rose. Aside from a few spelling errors. But let's not be nitpicky, it draws nothing from the story. I'm glad I took your advice and read your stories, they're good. You're very adept at conveying emotions through powerful descriptions. I envy your ease of explanation. I'm getting writer's block from just writing this review! Keep it up, this is interesting.

Great! It makes me want to read Redwall and Mossflower all over again! I enjoyed your blending of Brian Jacques's style and originality... Can't wait to read more!