Wow! Very interesting to examine chase and foreman by comparing them to each other! I like! I really liked the way you were specific with all of Chase's little quirks, from his apartment to his eating habits. It made the story a lot more realistic. And the question game was a great way to show us the truth about the characters and show how much they would reveal to each other of that truth. Excellent!

You are probably one of the best writers I have read in fanfiction. This is one of the best, most compelling stories I have read and I really hope you do make the epilogue in to a story. Especially since Conflicts feels unfinished for me, it definitely needs a sequel in my eyes. You have a great approach to the analytically writing the characters, particularly Chase, in this story that I need to read more of! Even things that were glaringly noncanon were easily dismissed because they flowed so well with your character and plot development. So, seriously, sequel please!

Well, I'd certainly love it if you turned the epilogue into a story. :D I

I liked the ending, thoug an epilogue wouldn't be bad. Perhaps what Chase thinks of their get together or Foreman talking to Chase about his dad's death. Excellent story.

Hell yes you should turn the epilogue into a story. Why haven't you yet?

yes!
you should!

Although this is a well written piece, thre are some major flaws in characterization.

Chase is portrayed as a Mary-Sue. He is young, multi-national, has an extremly high IQ, multiple residencies(including one for Red Cross), is "House's Favorite", figured out what no one else could, and on top of all that he had a soup-opra childhood. In addition to his dramatice canon backgroud you added in a highly publisized court case where he pulled the plug on his mom, and his dad refused to talk to him. In addition to that you also had Chase attempt suidide and suffer from clinical depression. Also, I found it annoying how ever flaw of Chase on the show, you manages to blame on someone else. His standoffishness, him ratting to Voglear etc. were all blamed on other characters. Also, the way other characters view him is not in canon. There is no "friendship" between House, Wilson, and Chase. The idea that they would go to eat and laugh at Foreman together is totally AU.
I also think that you portrayed Foreman as too egotistical, but more than anything you disregarded how he cared about his reputation. Screaming like that in a hospital would not just get you a slap on the wrist from your boss, there would be much greater consequence, especially with the type of language he used.
Cameron is portrayed as a lazy person who gets out of work to go to the spa. That is completly OOC, she is the most hardowrking of all of the fellows.
I felt that your relationship between Cameron and Foreman was overly friendly and was used as a plot device to get them to talk about Chase to show he is the better person.

I have one piece of advice and that is to instead of putting one character up on a pedastal focus on that character while still reconizing its flaws. You also need to make sure to reconize the good characteristcs of the other fellows instead of portraying them as lesser beings.

Yes, I think you should continue this story. you have invested so much in devoping the charactors I want to know more. Man Chase is messed up, it's really a good story and I want more.

YES!! i know, i at least, would love to hear that last bit from chase's POV. i'd also like to see Cam trying to win back his trust... hm... #strokes chin#

Hey! great story! I loved it! you write so good! it was so much fun reading it! and your whle idea' and the way you described everything, it was very good! and a lot of fun to read! thanks a lot for writing this fic!

Yes, you turned the Epilogue into a story, you visceous woman! *glomps anyway* I love your other stories, and would be thrilled with a sequal. Do whatever your Muse tells you to.

Wonderful, wonderful story! You should turn the Epilogue into a story!
(Though, as this was written last year it's quite possible that you already have and I'll find it when I look at your profile! XD)

Wow - I had originally not read this one because the summary didn't look all that impressive *blushes* - but I'm so glad I finally did. Not that the writing on the show is bad - it rocks obviously - but this would be so cool if they explored Chase more. *love love love*

Definatly, I love your work and this would make an awesome preview to an even better story!! Can't wait to read your next batch of Chase goodness!

the scenario of this story is actually quite interesting and at some points, very enjoyable. however, i'd like to offer you some constructive criticism rather than just saying 'i loved it! write more!'

first and foremost, the action that the entire plotline springs from seems out of character and unbelievable. foreman is a high achieving character who is very much attached to his job/reputation. he would aware of how incredibly unprofessional it would be to yell at chase in front of so many people using the type of language he used. for me to believe his reaction he would have to be placed in an incredibly extreme situation. perhaps i did not grasp the importance of the situation, but when i read it i didn't feel it justifyed such a violent reaction.
a more realistic response, in my opinion, would have been to have him speak to chase in a private setting. he could still rant and use the same language (though i felt it was over-the-top and a bit ooc) without putting his reputation on the line.

the second thing that struck me was your characterization of chase. i believe this has been mentioned in your comments before, but i'd like to reiterate-- chase comes off as a mary sue rather than a canon character. he's looks a bit like a martyr, he's wildly talented (the artist bit and the glowing comments he recieves), he's doubly exotic because of his parents' orgins, he has a melodramatic childhood, he's smarter than everyone else, and he even manages to not only endear himself to house, but secure himself an honorary position in the dynamic duo that is house and wilson.

third, you had some small, but noticable grammatical errors. those are easily fixed with a good beta. i would also urge you to edit the piece down some. occasionally i found myself skimming rather than actually reading because of the length. this is not to say that lenghty writing is inherently bad; it's not, but it is always good to run through writing and edit out what's unnecessary and repetitive.

over all, i liked the concept of the piece. it's meaty and provides a great means to explore backstory and character relationships. my general suggestion would be to think about why you've made the characters act as they do. as a reader, i find that i am jarred by many of their actions simply because i don't feel you've given me enough of a reason for me to believe in them.
it's easy to say someone is sad or mean over and over, showing your audience that this is true is your challenge.

i hope this has helped rather than hurt!
-cori :)