very cute

Nice story. I like it.

I enjoyed reading this story. HOWEVER: it is a little annoying to have to read all those italics throughout the entire thing. Of course, it's never wrong to use them, but this what you did was a little overdone. Apart from that, I had a great time with this story

GREAT MOVE, LEON!

That was amazin, totally epic I loved it :D 3

LOL An evil Leon! I loved that! He's my favorite bishie! But what he did to Sora and the results...hot hot hot.

I liked it. :)

Riku and Sora are so hott. :D

But yeah. I didn't like Leon in the story, even though I LOVE him. He's a bossy, lying, bastard and I loved that, sort of! hahah.

:))

Don't get me wrong, this was a good story, but there were just a few things I couldn't help but point out. I don't mean to flame, but just for constructively critical purposes.

First and foremost, the random italics were irritating. You really don't need that many italicized words, and quite a few of them didn't make sense when stressed.

Second of all, I do hope "tamami" was a typo, because the term is undoubtedly "tatami". You wouldn't want to give people the wrong terminology, would you?

Third, an obi belt has simply been called an obi in my experiences. You don't have to say belt, too. That's almost like saying ATM machine, except it's not technically redundant if you do say belt, but if you ask me it's just easier not to.

Fourth, I know for a fact than hentai means anime porn, and I believe you know that too, but I have never heard it used as pervert. Where'd you hear that?

Last, some of your grammar was off. I'm a bit of a grammar nazi, though. Need an editor? ;D Just kidding. But I'm serious if you are.

In any case, I really liked the story, and yes, I did like Leon's personality. Some of that was just plain dirty, though. _ ;; My, my, Cloud.

LOVED IT! xD very good lemon! hehe :)

There were WAY too many italics/bolds in this story. When you read things exactly as written, the amount of dramatic pauses and emphasis get less descriptive and more annoying. A few is cool, more than a handful a chapter gets pretty annoying.

But other than that, I loved the story. The idea of LEON doing something that evil is hilarious. He's such a ice prince. And the story is only made better for the LXC. It fights with AxelXRoxas for my second favorite KH pairing. (For some reason I only like Yaoi pairings for video games and fantasy-like anime. Weird stuff.)

i'm soo inlove with this story

that was hott, and it also gave me a tons of giggle fits. it's really nice to find quality yaoi lemons :] most of them are bad. you're is very good!

XD wow I like you story but I need to ask myslef a question... Why do I keep reading like lemon rated things? I don't know. anyway godd story.

Loved your story _ So very cute. It's almost like a two-for-one, what with both leon x cloud and riku x sora going on at the same time. There were some confusing moments where you switched from past tense to present, although that was the ONLY thing I could find wrong with it. Keep writting!

That. Was. Hot. XD Beautifully done; this is one of the first fics, out of the hundred or so that I've read, that really involved any masochist-ness and it was awesome! I love you for it. Oh my god, everything in this was so perfect, cept for a few mechanical and grammatical errors, but they were easily overlooked. _ Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful! And the OOC-ness just added to the hottness ... cause we know that if everyone was -really- OOC, then none of our favorite bishies would even be together in the first place! (Damn those het-loving gaming companies!) Yaoi will one day rule the world! Actually, the fangirls will rule the world, and yaoi will be the national symbol. *sigh* Wouldn't that be awesome! Yae for sadistic/masochistic Riku *quoting you: drools* yae for amazing smutty funny beautiful stories with the two best pairings in all of KH! w00t! I love you. *glomps* Well done!

AGH! 0o; *MAJOR NOSE BLEED* damn it that was cool. -.-; sexy sexy bois...myah. im such a yaoi loving perv. tee tee. YAY YOU HAVE A VAMPRE STORY! MUST GO READ! *zooms off*