This is a great, heartwrenching piece. I really like the poignant ending, because it seems to have a double meaning. She's calling her mom to cry after he leaves the first time, or years later, her daughter walks in, as he leaves again.

I hate it. I hate it, I hate it, I hate it, because I want him to change. This is what makes you such a great writer. You bring out emotions in people.

Well that just about broke my heart. But I loved the pacing of it, the back and forth, the little snippets of their time together. Great style.

Amazing. This story felt like it could have been made by the writers of Gilmore Girls. Great writing, simple, and flawless. Especially love the Jess comments on Rory's stomach (a scene which you said "will never happen"). Fantastic job!

So ubelievably sad and well-written.

i love your kind of writing, even the swearing. this is so... jess. you're amazing.

How do you properly write a review for a story like this? I mean, my vocabulary, even for a 4.0 student, is not large enough to come up with a stronger word than 'depressing'. Seriously. Because that word is what I need to properly write that review.

OMFG, that was amazing. but it doesn't look like you've updated in awhile. I discovered this fic at and I didn't know if I could view the updates. I can't find this script at either. So it would be very much appreciated if you could e-mail me when you update!

OMG! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE E-MAIL ME AND TELL ME WHEN YOU'LL UPDATE!

This story really makes me hate Jess. I know he's known to be running away when things get hard but would he really leave his own kid behind? That would be just cruel. I really want to smash this Jess against the wall (I really don't know how to, but whatever) ,but better having him leave now than in some years when the kid has to witness it all.

She chokes and wipes her mouth. "Let me help you pack." This is killing me.

I don't know how you do it, everytime I read one of your stories I'm either in tears or just simply amazed. I think this time it was both

I have to pretend I'm not almost crying...or I would be mocked mercilessly by my boyfriend, who is sitting behind me.

It was great. And this is coming from someone who has a strict policy of abandoning fics at the mention of pregnancy.

As I am crying, my typing skills are limited.

Perfect.

I really want to review your work chronologically, so this is just a very short note, commending you for being honest and brave. I've noticed that many Lit writers like Jess more than they do Rory (especially seasons 4/5 Rory) and, although they keep his snarkiness and his irritating noncommital answers, they also portray him as the Jess he could potentially be, grown up and matured, or the Jess he was with Rory in season two. In this scenario, although Jess is my favourite television character, he's a bastard. That he could leave his wife after having that happen to him is inexcusable in my eyes.
This: "The lock clicks behind him. In the bedroom, Rory cries harder, her fingers clawing at the cord.
“…Mommy?”" It makes me more than sad, it makes me angry. 'Clawing' has a desperate, bestial connotation.
Superbly written.

This one goes shooting up somewhere near the top of the list. I like character sketches that just reveal. No apologies, just the truth that makes you feel.

Wow...that was incredible. It was so sad, but it was written amazingly well. One of the best fanfics I've ever read.