What a beautiful ending. Just what the Brain Tree said...everything was so beautiful. It was poetic and deep. I love the last line. I love everything about this fic. Your story is wonderful.

Oh my God. That ending was so freaking beautiful.

That was.. beautiful...

Wow, the first part of this chapter was so sad, and I felt tears in my eyes, but then the second part was really happy. At first, I was outraged at what Mika did, but luckily Max was able to get revenge on them.

A couple mistakes here and there: one time, you called Vali a baby skeith, and once you accidentally called her Ferny. But other than that, I don't think there were any mistakes.

This was a great chapter. You add depth and meaning to your story, and that makes reading it just that much better. I'm trying to figure out if this is an ending or not--you've made it so that you _can_ end it if you want, but I really hope you write more. I want to know what Max, Ferny and Vali, and Albert's lives are like after this whol ordeal. I hope you write more.

Wow, that was a great chapter. There was a nice twist of irony, Ferny going from unique and rich to abandoned and normal. It shows that her 'happiness' was only superflicial, and not true. And things are looking up for Max--hopefully that won't change. But who knows, maybe he'll realize that he can be happy the way he is; he's already doing a good job of it.

I found one spelling mistake in the first paragraph: you wrote "but all of the Mutants looked the same to be" That 'be' should be 'me.' But other than that, your writing was flawless.

I'm wondering what will happen to all your wonderful characters, and I hope you write more soon. :)

Wow, I love your story. Each character has his or her flaws and good traits, and we get to see them grow. Your story encompasses all of the characters in their different walks of life, and because of that we can see just how different they are from one another. I was rooting for Max as he gained self confidence. And I also had a particular fondness for the Brain Tree; I love how you've portrayed him. I'm only hoping that his intelligence will allow him to evade the brutallity of the police's premature judgement.

I like how you constantly tie in the beauty of flowers; it links everything together and keeps the focus of the story in mind. Which, from what I've gathered, is about how beauty doesn't last long, and its more about the mind and spirit of a person than outward looks or money. And cheap imitations of that spiritual beauty, such as plastic flowers, lack the true sincerity that warms our hearts when we view it. It's a hollow mockery. ...Or that's at least what I saw in your story. If I'm entirely wrong, I apologize. But that's what I see, and that's what I like about this. It's got a meaningful theme. (or I've applied one myself at least, lol. XD)

I do have one suggestion for you, however. I wasn't able to find any spelling mistakes (which I commend you for, since that's hard to do :) ), but the switch from character to character was confusing. It was obvious to tell, after a paragraph or two, that a switch in POV had occured. But you should seperate them somehow. Maybe put the page divider in, or - or just anything (some people like to get fancy with it, and have a combination of * and ~). That way, the reader knows automatically that the scene has been switched and doesn't have to always wonder 'is this paragraph a different scene from the last?' It wouldn't be too hard to go back and add dividers in, and it'd be helpful for the reader.

I love your story, and I hope that you write more soon. I can't wait to see what happens to all the characters. You've developed great characters, giving them three-demensional personalities. I feel like I'm experiencing what they are. Your story reaches out to the reader, and it takes a good writer to do that. :)

I really like this story.

Neopian Beauty is told through the 1st person narratives of 4 people. However, the head switching isn't a big problem. Each character has a distinct way of speaking and phrasing. I would suggest you put some kind of mark to show where you're going to switch characters, as it was confusing when I was reading previous chapters.

I also like how the characters have different degrees of intelligence. The Brain Tree's narrative is packed with eloquent speech, while Albert's is a big more crude. Max and Fernypoo fall in the middle, both educated but not highly refined (at least to the Brain Tree's extent). I think Albert's coming off as a bit too smart, at least for a Kacheek that's been enslaved for so long with no owner education. (Gauntlet? Absolving? It seems a bit too advanced for Albert)

I'd like to hear more on Fernypoo's relationship with her sister, Vali. Fernypoo comes off as very self-absorbed, selfish and vain. It surprised me that she would go to such lengths to retrieve her sister. Is there some kind of sympathy or mutual bond that Fernypoo shares with Vali?

I'll be waiting for the next chapter!

Okay, I'm gonna stop being lazy and review this story.

What I've always liked most about your style of writing in Neopets fanfiction is how you take charecters and put a new spin on them(I'll never see Sloth the same way again.) You've always shown how little we actually know about Neopets charecters, and I've always appreciated reading a story like this.

In 1 chapter, you've managed to link all of the charecters together. I figured that it would happen, but not so soon.

Great story, as always, can't wait for the next update.

Excellent. One of the best Neopets stories I've read, if not THE best. You have to continue.