|Reviews for Crimson Intolerance|
| dyingimmortal 6/10/13 . chapter 1
Drunk-off-his-rocker!Chrono is so adorable! Thanks for writing this. XD
| takanobaka 8/18/11 . chapter 1
Brilliant. Just... brilliant. I was laughing my head off the entire time. Poor Chrono's gonna be in for it now...
| FadingNoctis 2/27/11 . chapter 1
So cute! I have to admit I was looking forward to Chrno's punishment. XD
Amazing. Keep up the great work. ;)
| jax2468 6/24/10 . chapter 1
this was so funny and i hope you write another fic!
| arisu09 11/27/09 . chapter 1
hahahahahaha! please update more!
| beautifly92 9/12/09 . chapter 1
reviewing four years later than published xD
But it's worth it n.n
| Chikanpo 8/21/09 . chapter 1
BWAHAHAHAHA!1!1 I like drunk Chrno! That was hilarious xD Drunk stories always crack me up :3 Man, now how is Rosette gonna explain this lol, and last night xD If she actually told him, Chrno would be so embarrassed! I almost wanna see that lol. AWESOME story xD
| ElfIcarii 3/16/09 . chapter 1
That may have been OOC in parts, but it was HILARIUS! Awesome!
| banapples669 2/7/09 . chapter 1
YOU ARE AMAZING. i practically laughed my ass off reading this.
| DarkMignonette 2/7/09 . chapter 1
Wow. xD That was hilarious, poor Chrno, poor Rosette, haha. The fluff was nice too though! Really good story.
| Dragoncl 7/29/08 . chapter 1
Haha! This was great. I was giggling through the entire thing. Don't worry about OOCness. Drunk people tend to be OOC. It was sweet with just the right amount of humor. Brilliant!
| lazy.aces 4/5/08 . chapter 1
I love your stories and i think this one is pure genius! Keep up the good work! I wasn just wondering if their would be another chapter to this but if its a one-shot...
| Selenity Jade 3/28/08 . chapter 1
LOL! This was a brilliant drunk-Chrno fic _ I loved it.
| rivendellelve 1/17/08 . chapter 1
*lol* that was hilarious
| Ganheim 11/22/07 . chapter 1
from a rich red to an almost orcher color
[I believe the spelling is ‘ocher’.]
He missed out on the wine we had at my place, afterall.
[Spacing: after all.]
her own first sip wound up plastered to his face as soon as the liquid touched her lips).
[I think that ‘splattered’ might better fit than ‘plastered’, which generally refers to something with thicker consistency than wine.]
but at least I know that when you recieve a gift from someone,
[I believe the proper spelling is ‘receive’.]
see what amused her."What's so funny?"
[QuickEdit may have eaten spacing after ‘her.’]
Rosette stared at the slient demon's back,
her mouth mimicing a fish out of water
The demon grinned, and as though he had expected the action, dodged underneath her flying fist and popped up right in front of her, poking her nose lightly with his index finger.
[I can’t say what specifically about this line I liked so much, but it’s one that stands out as a favourite.]
Suceeding in preventing
and insulting each other to noticed the figure in the near distance.
[to _notice_ the figure in the near distance]
Perhaps it was being delievered for Sunday mass purposes?
more than likely recieve punishment.
Maybe she should have given her the benefit of the doubt afterall.
[Punctuation: a comma is implied but seems missing after ‘doubt’. Spacing: after all.]
"He's so adorable when he's intoxicated!"
[I laughed so hard at that line, congratulations. The whole situation is funny, but this line stood out for sure.]
and blissfully obvlivious of the audience.
The blue-eyed girl's fist stayed poised above the whining figure's head, where it had just struck.
[Simple, yet so comical.]
The drunken demon took the gesture the wrong way.
[I was laughing before he even shouted about a hug.]
A slience followed,
Chrno was also unsually silent,
causing the unsuspecting demon to fall unceremoniously from her lap and onto the floor.
[Unceremoniously. What a convenient and appropriate word for an uncontrolled tumble. I wonder if one can ceremoniously fall to the floor.]
The demon could only squwak
she thought he looked irresistably adorable.
sending her right down ontop of him
[Spacing: on top. Might have been eaten by QuickEdit, but you can beat QuickEdit.]
Rosette's excrutiatingly long night
And I don't apologize for any OOC-ness.
[Actually, I think everybody was remarkably in-character. The only stretch was Chrono taking the first swig of wine and that’s a very small suspension of disbelief. Everything else felt remarkably true to the original – besides also being hilarious.]
A few technical flaws existed, but not enough to ruin an excellently written story chocked full of humour. If these small errors were gone, this would without a doubt be sitting in my favourites – that’s how good it is. The only other thing I saw was that the first ‘o’ was removed from Chrono’s name, though that looks like it happened all across the Chrono Crusade section, even the heading title. Weird.
God bless and happy writing,