Finish the story. I wanna see what happens next. xD

you did good. Some of the spelling and the writing was off. But good hon keep up the good work and get to the point faster next time ok .

I found alot of mistakes it has some really good potential but your tenses are way off if you want e-mail me and I will help you I beta for some people!

A grat start to a story. I love the interactions that I see taking place. I love also how they are in denial over the whole thing.
Little correction, you used the word remember a few times where I think you meant reminds. It's the inner beta in me begging to correct...lol. Great fic though.