| Reviews for Mr Fantastic |
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itsMefromGERMANY 2/2/09 . chapter 1 ok, first of all: im from germany so please, dont say anything about my english...ok, to the story, dont know if you also know it but here in germany theres a tv anime called One Piece with a character named Ruffy, who has the same abilities as you gave shadow...thats kind of suspicious but i really really like your story ( maybe because i like one piece...whatever...well done! ;-) |
SweetlyDemented 9/5/05 . chapter 5Wow, that was great! But you said "then" too much... Try using "Next" or another word so you won't have to keep reppeating the same word, ok? |
SweetlyDemented 9/5/05 . chapter 4Cool. So Eggman is as stupid as I thought he was... |
SweetlyDemented 9/5/05 . chapter 3That was so sweet! I loved it, it was awesome! |
SweetlyDemented 9/5/05 . chapter 2Aw man, Sonic had to ruin the moment o Oh well, I still liked it tough... |
SweetlyDemented 9/5/05 . chapter 1That was cool, I like it |
bluesonic115 8/19/05 . chapter 5Its over? NOO! I loves it, exspecially Shadouge moments, thats like that 2nd greatest couple ever. |
ClanPan-goldenBoyMan 8/17/05 . chapter 5Is this the end? Darn it... but I loved it! Especially since this is a Shadouge. Not many stories of them out there. Great story! If it isn't over, than please update. If it is... *sniffle* |
Tyrack Wolf II 8/17/05 . chapter 5Aw... No more strechy Shadow... *starts wimpering* |
Rouge1992 8/13/05 . chapter 4 Luv this story, I see some of my ranting did the story good, this chappie is the best so far. Obviously, your the one writing the story, not me, so you can do anything you want to with it. Well, glad to know there are other Shadouge fans out there. Update please. |
ClanPan-goldenBoyMan 8/12/05 . chapter 4HeeHee! This chapter was funny with the bomb part! As always, update soon! |
Tyrack Wolf II 8/12/05 . chapter 4I need to squee in joy. SQUEUEERRERE! ...I'm done. - Keep it up! |
Virtus the Protector 8/11/05 . chapter 3Good chapter as always! And I will grant your wish about the favourite authors list. You deserve it after all your work! |
shadowkunu 8/10/05 . chapter 3Yay! Fav"s! |
Guest 8/10/05 . chapter 3 Hi, good story but I can't help thinking it was a little, well, repetitive, I believe thats the word, eg. "Well, I'm gonna go and get me a drink." Maniac stated. "You go do that." Shadow added. Then Maniac got himself a bottle of beer, and drunk it.' You don't need to say that he drunk the beer, why else would he get one? Also, you don't need to continually say, 'said' or 'stated', if there's two people speaking then it's best to just leave the names off, eg. "Hi" said Kate "Hey there" said Melissa "How are you?" "I'm fine". See? You expect to know who's going to speak. Oh, and one more thing, it's really repetitive saying 'Couldn't help', it's really repetitive. I hope I haven't offended you, I've just pointed out parts of your story which make it annoying to read. Well, update soon! |