Reviews for Time Apart from Time

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Kadros The Minion of Time 2008-07-23 ch 40,	abuseWhile this chapter may not be long, it has a lot of content. Fight scenes are difficult to get right, and I think you did an excellent job showing the battle with Masa and Mune. And you characterized the twins very well in such a short time. Sorry I kind of disappeared from the reviewing scene, but now I'm back, and I'm very curious how you're going to resolve the Masamune and Glen. I hope your jobs don't leave you too stressed out over the summer, and even if you don't manage to update, I hope you find some time to just relax.
dragonmaster8 2008-07-15 ch 21,	abuseI know you're miles ahead of this chapter and my input won't magically change anything, but I still feel like reviewing. I think you've done a great job with the future. I always found it trying to be far more depressing then it came across as in the game, and how severely bothered the three were by finding out this is what their world would come to never seemed very accurate with the minimal interaction they'd had. Your portrayal of the world is far more accurate for the reaction they seemed to get in the game, and I'm even glad you didn't have them suddenly decide "Yeah! fight the giant spiked thing that just slaughtered the world because we're good people!" That always seemed unrealistic, and how you've had Chrono, Marle, and Lucca react has fit the personalities you crafted for them well. Balthazar seemed accurate in his behavior for what his role is later in the game/story.
dragonmaster8 2008-07-14 ch 9,	abuseSunrise is far from as glorious a thing as its made out to be... Frog's character seemed a bit more...condescending(?) then he'd appeared in the game. But then again he never got to speaking much on his first time with the team. As for the changes here, they're a refreshing welcome from any kind of "copy and paste" format of novelization. As long as the general story remains in tact I'll probably welcome any changes you bring about (especially on minor things such as Leene's captivity).
dragonmaster8 2008-07-14 ch 6,	abuseThe addition of the feast I found interesting and it brought me into a world of what might be, seeing how much of this game won't easily be transcribed into a story, at least for these beginning parts. I'd always found it odd in the game how you could just run through a throne room undisturbed and climb a tower to meet someone regarded as a queen and not a soul questioned your alone time with there so recently returned royalty. I believe you've handled this part well, and the story is moving nicely thus far. But, this is thirty some-odd chapters away from your most recent update so I think I'll refrain from commentary at the moment. Onward with reading!
dragonmaster8 2008-07-14 ch 3,	abuseThis is fantastic thus far, and I'm glad I found this. Before I continue I must mention I don't sleep much and apologize for any confusing typos that may be found in this review. That being said, please allow me to comment on what I have read thus far. The overall theme of the story seems to have become more mature than the original, and Chrono has been presented in every way opposite how I interpreted him from the game. Yet I'm pleased with how you've done his character. The introduction of Marle immediately excited me for I was looking forward to how you would present her. The hyperactivity and general behavior you have her exibit fits well with the game's presentation. You're writing style is rather good and since you've made it clear you don't want pointless appraisel I'll leave now to read more.
Arcaner 2008-07-04 ch 40,	abuseI thought the fight went well, surprisingly. Though, I am wondering where things are going to go. On top of that, I'm finding that my memory of this specific part of the game to be a bit foggy, so I don't mind the minor changes to the story. :) Update soon! -Arcaner
Jet22 2008-02-08 ch 30,	abusejust back to reply that i am still reading your story and it is amazingg you made all of the characters very well :)
Jet22 2008-01-30 ch 13,	abusewow this is amazing! I know that i haven't read through it all yet but i have a long way to go and wanted to tell you how much i am enjoying this story how much research you had to do to write it! i always love seeing the characters in a different light and a more detailed story of the game i love it :)
NetOwl 2007-12-23 ch 29,	abuseReview of chapter 29: Ah, now I'm really catching up. "So, a few months earlier, she had built this shack which everyone admitted was rather poorly designed but had kept the curious away." Slightly awkward subordinate clause there. "Chrono stood, stroking his new sword from Melchior and examining the Telepod, which filled the center of the room." When did he get this sword, and how nifty is it? I am probably inclined to ask mainly because I usually treat new weapons for him as the most important items in the game (other than the Gold Stud, Wondershot, and Haste Helm). "'But I am learning,' Robo stood." Either this is a typo ("stood" instead of "said"), or else the speech tag does not contain a speaking verb. Either way, I would edit this sentence, changing "stood" or changing the comma in the quote to a period. "he’s a walking dictionary, man-at-arms, and housewife… all in one" When I read this, I immediately think of the cutscene in Disgaea: Hour of Darkness where Etna and Jennifer attempt to market the superrobot Thursday on the Netherworld Home Shopping Network. Lucca's sales pitch is somewhat similar to theirs. I like the fight scene when Chrono first lands. He's still a little clumsy, but he gets creative. Very believable. "Ten minutes later Toma returned with the young boy." Is this Chrono? It seems a little vague. "Now he couldn’t remember his own name, let alone what to do with his sword." This line reminds me of something one of the Hunters tells Vaan in Final Fantasy XII: "You look like you hardly know which end of the sword goes in the monster." "However, it wasn’t until the third one until he scored a hit." "Until" appears twice in this sentence. Overall, great chapter. I like the action, and you manage to keep the characters believable. Chrono, with very little experience so far, does somehow manage to dominate the entire Mystic army all at once like he does in the game. I like how, despite his obvious talent for this sort of thing, he manages to get roughed up in the fight. I also like how Nadia struggles with the healing, as well as how the interaction between her and Chrono roughly parallels the segments in the future when Chrono had his leg injury. Nicely done, and I look forward to reading the next chapter tomorrow.
NetOwl 2007-12-23 ch 28,	abuseReview for Chapter 28: It's been a while since I've been able to sit down and read, but I find myself able to jump back in with relative ease. Your Chrono Trigger world is a nice combination of immersive and natural, greatly simplifying my job as a reader. Actually, I think I've read this chapter before, but I don't have a review posted, so I'll reread it. Chrono's mother appears to be reacting a bit more realistically here than she does in the game. Then again, perhaps someone living down the road from Lucca's family is already prepared for just about anything. "You’re another ghost – come to taunt me?" Another ghost? Hmm. Interesting.
Frog Lady 2007-10-19 ch 36,	abuseHmm, this is quite interesting. I like especially how you develop the other minor characters, especially Tata and his father. I could just feel the emotion there. Whoo. I think this is really foreshadowing and not filler. While the mood is not exactly like that in the game (it's much more light-hearted, "gamey", you might say), I like how you made this distinctly a story and not sticking to the canon too much. I also like how Chrono feels about the prophecy. He's just the type of person who doesn't believe anything until he sees it happen (at least, in your story he is). So yeah. Good job. Can't wait to see the next chapter come up.
Arcaner 2007-10-09 ch 35,	abuseHaha. Well, I'll give you this, I think that currently the greatest threat to the world is Chrono, Lucca, and Nadia killed each other. Haha, they really seem at each others throats these days. :P Good update, wish I had a better review...instead of this generic thing. Anyway, keep it up! -Arc
Arcaner 2007-09-24 ch 34,	abuseHaha. You know what I find interesting about this story? You give Chrono a voice and mind of his own and he is no longer the silent killer who just happens to be an awesome swordsman. Haha. I like Chrono's reluctance but I do hope he becomes a bit more...seasoned towards the end. Then again, this is probably just me being nitpick-y because I love silent protagonists. The only character I don't quite understand is Nadia, well in this chapter I do, but I guess I just miss some of the energy from the game (Though I think that it is probably because the game didn't have the constraints of a story). So yes, I keep comparing your characters to the games, and I'm not always happy (Sometimes I just want Chrono to pull out his sword, slash a few bad guys, without so much as uttering a word, haha.) But no, good story, and hopefully Chrono gets a thicker back bone, the world has to be saved! Expect to be fighting! Update soon, -Arc
Sparkling Moon Phoenix 2007-09-10 ch 2,	abuseThis is brilliant! I particularly enjoyed the scene with the hammer attraction. This is going on my favourites list as of now. I promise I'll read the rest later. Update when you can, I'm very patient.
Frog Lady 2007-09-08 ch 3,	abuseSo we've got a wiry guy who everyone thinks is wimpy but really brave on the inside; a really hyperactive girl who's got a secret she's not keeping too well; and a slightly eccentric girl who is not very modest at all. I must say, I like the interpretations of these characters, especially Marle's. Her hyperactivity makes me laugh.

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