 neverevereverdothisagain 8/30/05 . chapter 1Dear Lord...where should I begin? This is a total mess...worse than a mess. Where you smoking something when you wrote this? The grammar, spelling, and sentence structure are so simple and riddled with errors that they mimic kindergardeners' English exercises. Not only that, but the dialogue is atrocious; these characters would never, NEVER, speak/act this way. Don't bother updating this pile unless you fix it first. |