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| sousie 2007-11-26 ch 5,  | abuseupdate ! |
| broadwaychick07 2007-11-25 ch 5, | abusethis is an interesting story... but what is a half-breed? update soon! |
| SerenityDeath 2007-11-24 ch 5, | abuseO I loved it. can't wait for more!! |
| claire 2007-05-09 ch 4, anon. | abusehave you given up on this? its a really good start! hope you update soon! |
| Starlit Warrior 2005-11-18 ch 4, | abuseLol. Wow, this is pretty fast paced! Good luck on the next chapter and God Bless!! |
| keepoath 2005-11-13 ch 4, | abuseI loved your chapter. Please don't take too long to update...PLEASE! ~Keepoath ^_^ |
| serena r 2005-11-12 ch 4, | abuseHey this story is getting better as it goes. But what bothers me is that your chapters are so short can you try to mak them longer please. This story is really good it just needs some more explanation. |
| bleueyes 2005-11-12 ch 4, anon. | abusewell the story is great and i think that the things will get better and better.oh and i allmost forgat the punch that serena gave to darian was super great it was very funny.i can't wait until the next chapters.:) |
| NightFire89 2005-11-11 ch 4, | abuseheya thx for the update i loved this chapter ^__^ can't wait for the next one :D hehehe Luv NightFire |
| CharmedSerenity3 2005-11-11 ch 4, | abuseI hope this is a Serena and Darien story. |
| keepoath 2005-08-19 ch 3, | abusecool! I can't wait for your next chapter! |
| CharmedSerenity3 2005-08-19 ch 3, | abuseThis chapter was a little better, I hope you finsihed this story, because it would be upsetting if you didn't =) |
| Allison 2005-08-19 ch 3, anon. | abuseOh, this is cool. Please update soon! |
| AndiVoice 2005-08-19 ch 3, | abuseI still like the present part much better than the memories. The memories don't seem to connect to the rest of the story, which might be okay if they were shorter. Also, the child Serenity isn't complex enough. I refuse to like her untill she has at least one incourigable character flaw, or makes at least one unforgivable mistake. As for the new chapter, it looks promising. The adult Serena gets caught lying, is uncomfortable around nice people, gets embarassed when she catches people doing things they shouldn't, and is overall much more believable. Just be careful to explain why she was eating in the hay loft. I'm pretty sure that in that era, the help ate in the kitchen. You could put in something about her liking heights or wanting to see the sunset, though. Keep writing! |
| CharmedSerenity3 2005-08-18 ch 2, | abuseCute, hope to see Darien come in shortly. |