Aw! Poor Vin! Also, love snooping Foaly. I wonder what they didn't see, once the cameras were off. ;)

See, the first time you did a gunshot misdirection it was cool. The second time, it didn't work so well. Sigh...besides this, good. Loved Root's rage over Sool touching Holly.

Again, too sudden. Randomly, Artemis is there. Naturally, he would be, but there should have been a hint. Still, love that Artemis is actually clueless, for once.

Sigh...return of the house elves. Sadly, I didn't actually like this part. Mostly because of the gremlins, though Holly's escape from the cuffs came too quickly. You should have hinted that hers were loose, making her escape a bit less random.

Oh, that meddling centaur! Cute, though the combination of the conversations felt a little awkward. Not horribly, but a bit. I felt like there needed to be more flow between their words, as if they were completing each other's sentences.

Yay! Holly has a sister who isn't utterly horrible! Or named "Ivy!" This made me happier than you can imagine. Also, love Xanthe's easy recognition of what is going on, compared to Holly's shock.

I know you already completed this, but I would have totally asked for some Trouble/Vinyáya, if I read this when it was released. Sigh...

Yay! Sexual tension!

O...poor Root. He's going to be all concerned over his little indecency, isn't he?

Loving the little jumps back in time. They're so much more romantic that the present time! Interesting inversion of what you would expect.

Heh...very amused about you mentioning demons and volcanoes, given that book 5 wasn't out when you wrote this. :)

Yay! The red one! It sounds like a position in a prophecy! Actually...you are really making it sound like he is part of a prophecy.

The gremlins sound like house elves from Harry Potter...

I always thought of Grub as a somewhat neurotic neat freak. He complains about his belongings enough for that to fit. I also think (since seeing the graphic novels) that is is INCREDIBLY cute. You know...cute in a hurt puppy sense. You just want to put him to sleep.

Aw, I love the elevator scene! Subtly hot, while still being quite awkward. Arching her back...yeah, I do that too much, myself. Very nice.

O...okay, interested. Even if I'm unlikely to finish the next chapter before midnight, when I've got to start writing, myself. Here's hoping, though.

Hm...interesting start. I hope you give a better explanation for why Sool quit. I'll read on, in the meantime.

Wonderful! Grand job! Great plot, good character development, and awesome humor! Love some of Foaly's one liners.

Interceptor wags his tail and barks happily. Shadow smiles behind his mask.

how soon would i like to see romance? umm...let me think...how about As soon as FRIGGA-LIGGIN possable!! sorry, i just REALLY LOVE root/holly