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PaleGringo 2008-04-20 ch 1,	abuseGreetings and good evening. Though in some form I had delivered this critique to you personally, here it is 'on the record,' so to speak. Now I will never argue that I am a total neophyte when it comes to Sherlock Holmes; about the only thing I could tell you definitively was that it was written initially by Sir Arthur Conan Doyle, a "Great Scot" in the truest form of the axiom. I went into "chapter 1" which you say is more of a prologue with little understanding of background so I'll probably end up getting lost or having to go back and re-read things more frequently than most of your esteemed readers. When I went through this particular chapter in its entirety, there were a few things that I thought were worth noting (apart from my general confusion). I'd noticed the specifics in the dialogue that gave each character their own distinctive voice; Holmes was very calculating, Watson (or his posthumous robotic variant) always proper, Lestrade impulsive and driven. The ability to convey three (at this point) distinct personalities by means of written prose is a powerful skill to posess and you do so very well consistently. One of the things that I wondered about, as a newcomer to the storyline, was some of the specific wording in the dialogue. At times, it seemed to suggest that it may not be happening in London at all - in fact, this chapter never implicitly sets the scene in London to begin with. Perhaps London is something totally different in the 22nd century? Honestly, you probably shouldn't feel the need to embelish details into every aspect of the story and I am positive that things will become more or less clear as I go through the ensuing parts. Still, a little explanation or background can go a long way into broadening your work to appeal to larger audiences. A fine start to an intriguing story.
kuro's girl 2008-01-19 ch 9,	abuseI'm so happy that you updated! Great chapter.
Lli 2008-01-17 ch 9,	abuseWahoo! huzzah! I`m thrilled you`ve kept going. excellent excellent excellent.
trouble-scorn 2008-01-17 ch 9,	abuseExcellent! I'm so glad you updated this story! It's a little tricky to read, and some of the writing is hard to crack through, but it's worth trying to figure it out. Great job!
softbalchick181 2008-01-16 ch 9,	abuseI'd just thought i'd say i've been reading this for a while and really like it. I think it is downright silly you don't have hundreds of reviews.
Dancers and Pharaohs 2007-11-19 ch 8,	abuseUpdate ASAP
Lli 2007-10-02 ch 8,	abuseWoah man, this is awesome! Totally creeps me out/enthralls me. I love it. Please do finish. This is something I really want to see the end of. Anyway, totally impressed. And your characterization is great. If you need betaing or anything, I`d love to help (anything to see the end!) Alicia
JadedFire 2007-07-28 ch 1,	abuseOh. My. Gosh. I thought SH22 was a dorky cartoon with a cliched detective, but man, this is the coolest story in the category. I just LOVE this scene: Beth Lestrade took the steps to the sitting room two at a time, not bothering to knock before entering. She found herself stuck dumb at the sight of it all. A massive chemistry set occupied what floor space wasn’t covered by stacks of books, papers, and furniture. Bottles of unknown liquids lay strewn about, or unceremoniously knocked over. The only clear place in the whole room was a lone chair by the fireplace, in which sat a hawk like man, his head bowed. “Do take care not to upset my chemicals, Lestrade.” The languor in Holmes’s voice accentuated by a wave of his pale hand. “I should hate to see them spilt.” He didn’t look up. Lestrade started to open her mouth. “I suppose Watson sent for you then?” Her mouth closed. “He did. What is the meaning of all this, Holmes? I haven’t heard from you in days.” “My dear Inspector,” he said looking at her finally, “surely you are aware I get a bit in the dumps, so why act surprised?” “Being depressed is one thing, what you’re doing is something else.” “Is it really?” “What have you been doing in here anyway?” She gestured towards the glass set on the floor. Holmes followed her gaze with his eyes rather than turning his head. “I have been attempting to re-create a sedative that has been off the market for sometime. I dear say I’ve succeeded. The solution works as it should.” Lestrade narrowed her eyes at him, speaking sternly “What solution?” “Hm? Oh. Morphine.” He held up an ancient syringe. “I would offer to you, but I agreed with the real Watson that the sharing of needles is a nasty habit.”-- Your Holmes is so well done and more like the way he was in the books. It makes so much SENSE that he'd try to make his own narcotics. He's a law unto himself, after all. Your Holmes has a spark that was definitely missing throughout SH22. He actually brings to mind the Granada version as well as the book version. I also like Lestrade in this story (read the whole thing and look forward to reading Chapter 9). I usually hate her (I don't like SH/BL shippings either). In the cartoons she just rubbed me the wrong way. But I like her in "Morphine". She seems so much more human and likeable. In fact, all the characters are well-done. I wonder if the Irregulars will show up. In a way, I hope not, though that's really up to you as the writer. I could go on and on about how much I like this. :-)
VHunter07 2007-03-19 ch 8,	abuseWow. This story is written so well. I read it awhile back & am glad to see your continuing to update! I must admit I'm a little confused on the whole time flipping thing, but I guess I'll get the hang of it. Please keep up the good work!
kuro's girl 2007-03-19 ch 8,	abuseI'm so happy you updated! Great chapter. Please update soon.
Baku babe 2007-03-19 ch 8,	abusewonderful though somewhat confusing. I had a bit of a slip trying to follow the plot these last few chapters, so I hope it'll become clearer.
kuro's girl 2007-02-17 ch 7,	abuseThis is a great story! Please update soon!
Augusta 2006-12-04 ch 7,	abuseSo, why is Sherlock having these dreams now? And which reality is...reality, 1889 or 2104? Can't wait for an update.
Fortune-Cookiez 2006-10-12 ch 1,	abuseAbsolutely. Bloody. BRILLIANT. Characterization is SU-perb, and the plot is thick with originality. Lovely, lovely, can't wait for the next chapter =D P.S. Tense HL antagonism is ~so~ HAWT. =P
Iara 2006-10-10 ch 7,	abuseThis is incredible! I love the description and the wording. I think this has to be one of the best pieces I have read. I am dying to find out what happens next.

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