Powerful imagery. Amen.

Aw, that was a good drabble. I love team Yondaime!

Wow! I love this story, with its amazing flow and all the symbolism and, I guess, foreshadowing. I also enjoyed how you were able to put together such an amazing introspective piece on a team that there isn't much information on, and I think you're view of Kakashi is especially deep. Great job!

Again, amazing, with beautiful description - and I love the symbolism in Obito's question. Perfect.

~Avalon

Beautiful story. Very well written. I love the imagery of the ocean and an approaching storm and the three of them standing on the beach.

Well done.

Very good and the symbolism and thought is nice too.

~ Uozumi

Maybe i've told you this already, but i absolutely love old yeller just as you portray him: he's young and he's vibrant, but one gets the impression that he is slowly being ground into nothing. Sometimes i think it was pity that allowed him to go out with a bang as a hero. And sometimes i think that when he trading his life, it was the worst joke ever.

I love that last line; it terrifies me. The prose that comes before it and that most beautiful concluding paragraph is a window into a life (or memory) that had been lived, foreshadowing the events that laterfollow.

What comes to mind is a suppressed scream, and that is just excellent.

/But as they turn around to head back to where their sandals are, the Yellow Flash notices the second illusion of the waves. As the water rushes back towards the ocean, it seems that, no matter how long his strides are, he is unable to make it back to the dry sand, forever retreating from the shore./

What I (almost) most love is how Yondaime sees the omen as an illusion. And what I /most/ love is how you personified the water and made it a 'he', and it really twists all of one's earlier observations.

I love Obito in this.

But the mood most of all. /Lovely./

Oh I really liked this. ^^ It was 'poetic' and had a lot of emotion ^^ Well writen.

That was quite a deep one-shot. I liked it. Shows the mechanism of Yondaime's team.