Very good. :D As you said, the run-on sentences are taking over the fiction, but besides that, the story is written very well. Very sweet.

I agree. This is a beautiful story.

OMFG THAT WAS ADORABLE!
*fan-girl sniffle*
*fan-girl squeal*
*fan-girl faint*
+
*fan-girl die*(from the absolute cute-ness of it of course)

i love sasunaru welcome to the club! really, this is like the only sure pairing in naruto, i mean hinata only admires naruto and sakura only is infatuated with sasuke. they do only pay each other mind, and it paves the perfect pairings for all the other characters. this is really great, totally original and everything! is ur friend goin to continue this somehow? i hope so, this is great! or maybe you could take a shot at it.

It was quit funny. I enjoyed reading it.I hope you will write another one like this soon.

Aww... cute. Is i/am/krazy going to continue this? I hope she is! =^.^= Very nice! I love sasunaru so much... -grins- too much...
Oh, by the way:
Bi bi? What does that mean...? ?.?

aw so cute ^_^
i wish i/am/krazy could make
a chapter 2 it would be so great
n e wayz
great story!