Reviews for The Butterfly and His Spider

Reviews For: The Butterfly and His Spider

Darcie Blain 2008-07-29 ch 1,	abuse-fangirl squee- -Kouen Kitsune
.Minx-101. 2008-04-02 ch 1,	abuseaw that was so cute cant wait for the nxt chapter
Lady of the squirrels 2005-10-01 ch 1,	abusegreat story, keep it up!!
snickers supereme 2005-09-20 ch 1,	abusei like it, i would definally realy the next chapter
LaDiDaanifan 2005-08-21 ch 1,	abuse... wow... I just read the reviews for this fic.. sorry about AL the flames.. BUT you should still continue.. to get every one mad >;) sigh later..
Rogue Wingweaver 2005-08-17 ch 1,	abuseI like it and I always thought they should get together. Keep it coming.
OMGWTFBBQ 2005-08-09 ch 1, anon.	abusestare ...What.. the hell... did you do to these poor, innocent characters? I've never seen such travesty! Please, if you're going to write.. write in character? Please? For the mental safety of all Trigun fans?
King00Nayr 2005-08-08 ch 1,	abuseWell written. I really like your style. I really want to see more of the series...this did not help that want...sigh...oh well...more on my to do list. Thank you for sharing!
Belie 2005-08-07 ch 1,	abuseHow bad is your school in its English department? Albeit, most schools don't have the best English teachers (including my own) but most of the mistakes you made you should be able to correct yourself with a reread. You wouldn't write an essay with these kinds of mistakes, now would you? It'd completely kill your grade. "...at first Vash was embarrassed but soon forgot because he noticed that his spider was trying to eat him with kisses, with lust, maybe even love." Spider? Vash doesn't call people spiders. His brother may, but not Vash. Vash actually likes humans and wants to be on an equal level as them so to call them a derogatory name isn't a good thing. Same with Wolfwood calling Vash a "butterfly". In your mind, it may sound romantic, but it's not even near the same class as "snuggly-bunny". Also, "I want to take you"? Imagine if a close friend of yours, who apparently has hidden feelings for you, just suddenly said that. Hell, imagine saying that to a person you have a crush on. It's not even a bad pick-up line it's just extremely creepy and Wolfwood following Vash all the way back only adds to the stalkerish feeling. "Nicholas leaned forward kissing softly Vash’s neck. Vash tried to push away but Nicholas grip was tight, and for the first time in many years Vash felt secure." Vash doesn't want that to be happening so why would he feel secure? Most people that are put into a situation where something is being forced upon them do not feel secure and especially not aroused unless they're in the bondage kink. Somehow, judging by all that Vash has been through, I doubt he's into that kind of thing.

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