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| epalladino 2007-12-18 ch 17, | abuseWonderful story. Excellent characterizations and plot development. Your rescues were especially vivid. This defininitely screams for a sequel and I hope you have the time someday to produce one. I have only one small quibble. Even though, in general, your writing was very good, you had a few too many odd typographical errors. These generally fell into the category of using one valid English word when you meant another (such as using 'pull' when you meant 'pool'.) These kinds of mistakes happened in a good many chapters. You write very well and to have someone help you weed out these misspellings would only improve something that is already quite good. Beth Palladino |
| tanpopo no hana 2007-12-13 ch 17, | abuseThat was a really great story! The development of the characters was brilliant! I hope you've started on the sequel - so many unanswered questions...ahh! |
| dancewithme92 2007-11-06 ch 17, | abusei love it is there going to be a sequel? |
| dreamgirl93 2007-06-19 ch 17, | abuseI can't wait to read the sequel, seriously. No pressure- but hurry up! "The words I wish I'd said" was awesome, totally bubbly(bubbly is super super super cool!) Greatr work. keep it up! |
| firestorm557 2007-05-16 ch 17, | abusehey there. i just wanted to say that i have read this story multiple times and each time it just keeps getting better and better. i know you said that there was def going to be a follow-up story to this one, i was just wondering if that is still the plan? i would really love to see all the story plot lines that seemed to be unfinished by the end of this story get all sorted out. plus i am really intrigued as to how the whole gordon-scott thing is going to play out. so i hope that your muse hasn't left you, and really hope that i see another thunderbirds story from you soon. thanks for the great read and keep up the good work! |
| Iniysa 2007-05-08 ch 17, | abuseOkay, really want that sequel now. LOL! Just re-read your story and it was as good as last time! Can't wait! Lauren |
| cassie 2007-01-04 ch 17, anon. | abusethat was a great story i just read it all the way through alan and tin-tin are so cute togeth is there going to be a sequel? |
| Teh Healist 2006-11-03 ch 17, | abuseOi... what kind of cruel and unusual person would put a semi-cliffhanger at the end of a story? I mean, seriously. The fact that all you heard Alan say was "Dad" kind've unnerved me. Then again, that was probably the effect you were looking for, so good job on the uber-reclusive Alan. I liked how you started off with the business card, came back to it every now and then, and then finished with it. Kinda made things come full-circle, I guess. A few grammatical errors, but it's pretty much impossible to catch everything, even with a beta. It's as small as accidentally writing "there's" instead of "theirs", and so it's not exactly a horrible problem that you have to fix ASAP. Heck, the errors are so few and far between that I only remember them because my english teacher has hammered into my head the idea of being a stickler about grammar. Stupid english teachers... Anyway, excellent chapter as always, and a nice finish to the story. To be honest, I wasn't quite sure what I would think of a Thunderbirds story when you first started it (I'd seen the movie, but that was it), but I have to say that you did an amazing job, as usual. Keep up the good work, Healie |
| Bexi-chan 2006-10-31 ch 17, | abuseFlippin brilliant. Absolute genious. Incredibly crule! Dude that is by far the meanest clifhanger i have EVER seen, and thats saying something! It's a bloody good job you make up for that with impeckable writing skills and plots. This is smashing and ill leave you with a heartwrenching plea for a sequel to be posted soon! Please be my sunny sky on an otherwise cloudy day! lmao good one and keep on Truckin'! |
| DMH1973 2006-10-28 ch 17, | abuseI like it , sort of what kind of decision do "you" think he would make. I like it like that! |
| Anakin's Girl 4eva 2006-10-26 ch 17, | abuseHow could you leave the story on such a cliffhanger?! Awsome awsome story, I have really enjoyed reading it over the time that it has been posted and am eagerly awaiting the sequal :-) Well done on a great story. |
| Lady Eivel 2006-10-25 ch 17, | abuseThere's gonna be a sequel? YAY! Please write it soon! |
| Bridget Vreeland 1 2006-10-23 ch 17, | abusegood chapter! so sad about alan! please update soon! |
| Lady Shadow Of Time 2006-10-23 ch 17, | abuseVery interesting chapter, congrats on this fabulous story! |
| Boann 2006-10-23 ch 17, | abusewhat? No! You cannot tell me that was the end! At least consider a sequel? Anyway, bottom line: you've done an awesome job with this fic. The epilogue was the most inspiring. I really think you captured Jeff and Alan as characters. Hopefully I'll see more of your work around! Boann |