EXCELLENT! A very nice fan fic. I especially like how you explained how Avatar knew, all the way at Pluto, that Astra's ship was on a collision course with Mars. Even as a kid, I wondered how on Earth he could know that. :0)

Great job.

Nice first submission - hope to see more

What a fine first attempt-your imagery and dialogue mix together and paint a vividly gripping picture of Starsha and Astra's designs for a peaceful universe.

Desslok as he was along with his commanders are as vicious as the Gamilons were before Nova and Derek saved his life-and he is a ruthless and formidable enemy.

What a heartrending last scene-thje ultimate sacrifice for the good of humankind on the desolate serface of Mars.

Excellent job Fluffy.