I know I'm late to the party but I am really enjoying your story. I didn't think I would but it was on the favorite list of another author I really enjoy so I gave it a shot and I am very glad I did.

I cannot imagine trying to write a story in French or Spanish. It takes serious mastery of a language to write this well and convey complex ideas using common English slang. I am so impressed!
Cheers, Free

Wow.I love your story so far.

This is so sad at the end. It was a good ending though. You did a really nice job at it.

This is a really good story. I like it. It's well worded, fluid, and the plot is perfect, not boring, not cheesey, not Mary-Suey. Just right. I congratulate you. A full five stars. Yet, I can't believe you have so little reviews. This is atrocious!

no fair making me cry... seriously that was amazing. I have loved evey minute of it.

Cheers,
Helen

M. Beautiful final chapter... it's very bittersweet, but yes, it offers us some closure.

It's almost ironic that *now* he can see his daughter, something he couldn't have done when he was alive.

No flames from this gal. Thank you for the entertaining read.

-Scarlett

Oh no! You killed him?! Say it isn't so! My poor, dear psychotic CIA officer...

*pulls hysterical self back together*

Um, yeah... sorry. Took me some time to recover from my initial shock, there.

A very moving and sad chapter m'dear. Now I need to read the next, and see how you wrap everything up.

Scarlett

Hi I just wanted to say I like your story. In the beginning I was a little worried this might be one of those silly girl stories, an excuse to pair up with Sands. But something made me come back to read more and more. With every chapter I like Omaha a bit more :)
And even if your English isn't perfect, I really do like your language (I hope you know what I mean), and that is more important than perfect grammar.

O, 2 more entertaining chapters!

Liking the character interaction here, especially between Sands & Omaha.

Oh dear! I do hope Sands comes out OK, but it's going to be an uphill battle, I think!

Hope to read more soon... have a good day!

-Scarlett

Oh no! Right in the middle of the action and you leave us hanging like that? You EVIL woman, you! And you haven't updated in a while... I'm worried. Please do update this soon. I enjoyed the good read thouroughly (it's 1 am here and I have to get up early in the morning to work!)

Great story, m'dear. Hope to see more of it soon!

All the best,
Scarlett

*adds story to favorites list*

Just found your story tonight, and I must say... I'm loving it so far! Although I'm only on chapter 3, I had to stop and let you know that you've already got me hooked. There's always been a bit of the romantic in me, and I think you've got Sands' thinking & character down quite well... which is not an easy thing to do!

I'm liking Omaha's character very much, she's normal and down to earth.

Loved this:

''Well, I'll give you that, but he's more shallow than a puddle!''

Made me laugh!

Kudos to you for writing in a language other than your native one! Although I know other languages, I don't know that I'd ever try writing a full story in one of them... you've done a most excellent job, and your writing style translates very well to English. :)

Well, I'd go on but I must continue reading... thank you for the entertainment!

-Scarlett

this was such a great chapter!! really sweet! and the first person point of view is a good idea. there's just a little thing that bothered me in this chapter, it's that a few verb tenses were wrong and so sometimes i had a little trouble following if what was being said was in the present or in the past...but apart from that tiny detail,i really loved this chapter (like the whole story by the way!) and i can't wait for more!
;-) bye for now!
blossomlite

I just started reading your story and I am caught up to you :) please update soon! I want to know what happens! I think your very brave to write a story that isn't in your native language...It's a nice story...keep up the good work!

hey! this story really is great!! by the way, i don't even know why i didn't update the last chapter...didn't have any time surely... I really can't wait to read more! Hope you'll update soon! ;-)
toodles! :-D
blossomlite

nice story! keep it up! ;-)
bye for now,
blossomlite