UPDATE...UPDATE NOW!please this is really good, imean really really good so please UPDATE FOR CRYIN' OUTLOUD!

Thank you for any and all asistances provided Bye
Savvyjewel

i know its to late but #1 make it Holly/Trouble if you want, i dont care and #2 The Whole Six Monthes! Thank you and Goodnight *dramatic bow and presses "Submit" *

Geez, you're a dedicated writer, in a goodway. Im proud of you writing skills, you inpire me: stay strong and don't give up, coming to a satisfying end. Atleast, I hope you did, goodluck with the rest of your fanfics! :)

In a few reviews someone pointed out some mistakes. Apparently Sool was in Internal Affairs—but I’ll fix that up next chapter.

Trouble is Retrieval One

I am
Major Trouble

On the way, she ran into the goal-keeper for the team, Al Brown.

... That's one of my dad's friends names...

I am
Major Trouble, and apparently I can play the piano

“Yup. Second only to first dunker—who’s that big guy. Y’know, the one that’s… big?”

The big guy who’s big, Holly thought wryly, Trouble’s got his own way of putting things. It sounded like the Hulk, as she had dubbed him at the tryouts.


But what startled Holly most was the uniform Lili was wearing. It was the standard Traffic uniform. As if that didn’t surprise her enough, the uniform wasn’t even that standard.

It was dyed pink.

Nice. I didn't even read the rest of the chapter yet. But Vein? And Frond? Yikes. Weird.

I am
Major Trouble

Vein is not an OC. I make it a point not to have OC’s in my stories. He’s mentioned as the top Captain in the first book.

Do you know where in the first book? I don't remember him.

I am
Major Trouble

But what she did know was that if they didn’t stop, Holly was seriously considering checking herself into a mental institution. Not to mention possibly suing Trouble Kelp.

I don't particularly appreciate being sued, thank you very much.

I am
Major Trouble

that quote is from Austin Powers dad.

what the heck happened to you? where the heck are you?

make it holly/trouble

Is this story still going on? If so then YAY update soon! If not then *sniff* you have made me sad, but seriously I enjoyed reading this and hope you update soon!

I WILL mutilate you if you don`t update, D`Arvit!

Mousse! Cool! I love it!

Phillip suits him/me. Love the plot.