Good start, even though I was expecting it was longer, or perhaps it was on your mind to keep it short? anyways I like this chapter, the description and the start, and I particularly liked that sentence you finished this chapter, so keep going ^^

The ending to this piece made me smile. Insight into the mind of a fledging, especially a Razielim is always a good thing and I like how you've done it here. You fit a lot into a fairly small space but it gives an incredibly clear impression of the character.

:)

I don't suppose you could be pursuaded to continue this at all?

Wow, you have a really nice style of writing. I particularly liked lines like "My sky has always been dark", and the detail about the people from an uncorrupted world. I'm not sure who it is that's speaking here (or perhaps I'm just really slow and haven't picked up on it yet!) but it does sound like Raziel, and if that's right, then you have definitely got his character perfect - especially the 'uncorrupted' jazz. I know it's just a little random stream of consciousness but you could extend it, perhaps create another plot and have this as the introduction, as it always works well when a writer really gets inside the character's head. Check over a couple of spellings and it would be almost perfect - and by that I mean that it could have a story attached to it. You shouldn't deprecate your writing ability in your summaries, you know, because it's really good. Sorry this is a bit soppy, I just can't find much to criticise (which is unsual) - well done.

"Reality bites." I liked that.

Will this story have a plot or will it be just meditation?