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| fiona 2008-05-02 ch 2, anon. | abuseI like the story and I hope you continue with it. |
| itsu-sual 2008-03-30 ch 1, | abuseaww, that was really sweet but sad. poor Rath! i hope you continue this one day! |
| anime-queen46 2008-01-09 ch 2, | abusehey go for it this would make a good story |
| Goddess of Twilight 2007-09-16 ch 2, | abuseHey, I think you should continue ^_^ it would be cool to see Rath and Nefer-tina get together...heh |
| fourfourfourfour 2007-08-26 ch 2, | abuseu should ttly keep going! i'd love to see what happens in the end! |
| kairi-heartilly 2007-02-08 ch 2, | abusehey! I'd really like to read this story if you are going to turn it into full featured story. I just love stories about Nefertina and Ja-kal! ^-^ |
| pyro's hoodie 2006-12-21 ch 2, | abuseYES YES YES Your should keep writting this story! For only one chapter so far its very good and funny. So you really should keep going. |
| Madame-Cazone 2006-06-03 ch 1, | abusePoor Rath. He totally needs someone to love. |
| glitterbee 2005-12-09 ch 1, | abuseAww. Poor Rath! I totally enjoy the idea behind this one Gol. You had some great dialogue in there as well. My only crit for it is that I wthink it might be even more effective if you drag it out in places to establish the character changes a bit more first. (I.E--Nefer-tina's inner dialogue about loving Ja-Kal. I'd have built up to it a little more so that when it hit, it really punches you.) But for a one shot-quickie, it was totally enjoyable. =^_^+ |
| Allura Arwen 2005-11-29 ch 1, | abuseAw! Poor Rath! ;_; That is so sweet! Poor Nefer-tina! I don't know about Rath knowing everything, but this is a real nice story! Keep up the great work! God bless! Allura Arwen |
| Mahalove 2005-09-10 ch 1, | abusewah what ... *sniff* this cant be the end |
| Katherine Burnett 2005-08-22 ch 1, | abuseThis is a great story. Very touching. Please write more stories like these. |