Well,for this,I know that his name is John,but i decided to mix it up.I know they do not get payed,but im not going by the book.lol.

So far, there are only three issues with this fic.

1. Spartans are trained from the age of 6 to do two things. Follow orders, and complete the mission at any cost, even their own lives. Its unlikely that a Spartan will want 'out' of the deal just because he was a prisoner of war.

2. Spartans don't usually have last names. Master Chief just goes by "John".

3. Spartans don't get paid to do what they do. They do it because its the right thing to do.

These are only small things. I'm way too picky about Halo though, so you'll have to excuse me. Anyway, this has some good action in it. Keep it up and I'll keep reading. -out

Wow that was really good and I am starting to see where this is going but that would be a spoiler. I hope to see some one live holy christ man. but whatever your fic not mine. I hope you write more I give this 8.6 out of ten. My only complant is that this seems to be nearing the end to fast but agian...your fic.

this is really good now that you have fixed some of the earlier errors. nice action, nice dialouge, some humor and enough action to make Paris Hilton flinch. Good stuff, just update sooner than last time lol/