Hm, so whose soul was taken? And has Gaara tried to old Sleeping Beuty cure yet?

God damnit. You took a GREAT IDEA FOR A FANFICTION, And you butchered it. YOU KILLED IT! ACk. I hate it when authors do this,

I'm not saynig I'm better, I butchered alot of my ideas before, so here's the lowdown on how to improve:

Don't rush into things,

To much drama and action, not enough stillness, calm,

To much exageration from the characters,

Proofread! You have a lot of spelling errors, your grammar is almost perfect though :D ,

Make sure that you NEVER EVER EVER EVER EVER make you're characters immensley powerful.

No one will ever be able to take more than one hit from naruto's Rasengan. EVER. If you read all of the manga so far (Look for scanslations too, they're neat :D ), you'll see that The Rasengan is definetley an at least two hit kill move.

You have REALLY GOOD character development, except in Robin's case. She seems as if she's an all powerful goddess, controlling the elements like that.

I had to learn the hard way, aka uber-flames.

All in all, it comes down to this:

Update soon OR ELSE! :D

T_T this is such a good story...i really thought she didn't love gaara anymore and it broke my heart...please update soon! this is very good!

I'm struggling not to cry at the news Robin is dead. It isn't fare, Gaara went through so much for her and now she's dead? That's just messed up!

nice story,its cool that kakashi has a wife

and gaara in love,ann hinata with naruto and...!

hehe lol

vely cute!

Are...Is...Is.. Robin... is she, really dead? Did she really die?...Oh god...

agh cliffe! i hate cliffe *sob* its brill

Damn, I hope Setsuko and Robin both surivive this, Gaara and Kakashi will probably lose the will to live if their loves die.

M...really great! Man, can't wait for the next chapter _

Yosh! Onegai, plz, update soon! [begging on hands and feet]

was it intentional that your chapters resemble the song Kryptonite from three doors down?

O.o whoa cool...! please update soon that is all i ask of you for x-mas

O. Ja Ne

Oh yeah, Setsuko just turned the tables on Ai. Now let's see her kick that bitch's ass! Bring on the downfall of Akatsuki!

Oh yeah, time to betray Akatsuki to save Gaara's life! Nice timing Robin!

update soon this roks