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| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 24, | abuseforgot to mention...the detail of the old guy slipping from country with the disc...great detail!...FINALLY time for Kim & Jack...to talk...again better that real 24...that never gave us this talk... I wrote these reviews from skimming through...a fast reread, wk after my full read...could have done better if I had been at computer screen to review as I read!... I am so amazed and the continuity of the many story lines, characters and your skill at wrapping it all up...and not quickly, but timely...action reading is not my genre of choice, but I have done it and will read more of your work...again, BRAVO! (it is Fri. nite, I am 2 days ahead of schedule :) ) |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 23, | abuseI really DID like this chapter...didn't need Sherry, wanted to put her on a slow boat to ?...but I loved the copter lifting off..Jack is one super fit guy!...Loud applause rises through the office...and I stopped typing to add my loud applause!!...not really, but I felt like it! |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 22, | abuseBauer got lose Mr. Taylor. Honest!...YES! |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 21, | abuseJack at the cannery...thank god just 3 more hours... Taylor's talk of raising his daughter...and of her death, sad. |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 20, | abuseCatherine...how do moles get it...trust no one... someone befriends Kim to help her leg...hm story of Catherine's father...so well thought out in your writing.. |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 19, | abuseSuch a tender touch to see star and hear, "Starlight, star bright..."...every child laying in a back seat has done the very same thing!!...then too powerful when back to their reality of reaching the warehouse!! |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 18, | abuseKim, Lisa...in the car, Michael in the trunk..ugh...at least we know they will all get to same place...wherever that is?? |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 17, | abuseKim tells Jack she is coming home...uhoh..there are too many hrs left...Miramar..is a realm beyond my thinking, but i will try to keep my mind together here! |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 16, | abuseyou know this writing is as good as Shakespeare!...his plots are endless confusions, mistaken identities, role-playing, but in a era without cameras, screens and surveillance...his plays were as exhausting as 24 hrs. in whole nites..hahaha...and somehow I am glad we are heading in the direction of wrapping it all up...but we're not done yet, are we? |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 15, | abuseThe phones don't work in this canyon area!...we would go crazy if our phones didn't work...but the farmhouse lady is so convincineg!...I am ready to get out of this canyon!! |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 14, | abusewow...Tony confronts Jack...your story gives us a so needed face-to-face with them that real 24 never did...good job! I am really believing that Jack has pieced the Mills' Nanny/Codis' daughter link...not just convincing writing...I am into these people...ha!...oh, Kim..goes her on way...I do hope nobody finds Heather,Peter, puppy... |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 13, | abuseTwo guys on Kim's tail...not my favorite...and Heather's car, low on gas...not good...OMG...Lisa kisses Jack; Jack kisses Lisa... wow, some momentary passion there...loved that...so there is room for info in a prequel in lives of Lisa/Jack...I am getting tired of Catherine...every office has a Catherine..and hopefully every office has a Michelle... |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 12, | abuseNot too bad...I was ready to leave the hospital...that's it on this one... |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 11, | abuseI read this chapter, trusting nothing...not the hospital, the apt. bldng..glad we are out of there...lots of extra names...that I skim through...ugh, Sherry Palmer, could have gone all day, 24, without her...a divorce, sweet!! though.. explosion in last second, thanks :) |
| Auntiem5 2008-07-03 ch 10, | abuseTony puts his hand around Michelle's waist.."I didn't know if I'd see you again!"...well, bring it on!!...i loved that moment...but omg..hrs more ahead, huh?...the apartment building hunt..no fun...so much technically correct altitude readings, mappings...really terrific..and so beyond my comprehension level...ha!!...and I am not halfway through this day, am I?!! |