 YumiAngel 1/9/06 . chapter 19just a nice fic! Loved JJ in the beginning^^ |
 hikarinotori 1/1/06 . chapter 19OHG! This is amazing! Please tell me you finished writting the story and just never posted the rest...Please. |
 7/29/05 . chapter 1 In case you haven't noticed, FAKE is set in New York. Not Japan. It can be explained when Ryo uses the ocasional Japanese. JJ uses a little in the manga, so that is excusable. Maybe a little of Bikky and Dee, if you claim that they learned it from Ryo, though that is a bit questionable that they would speak it so often, using fan Japanese for the most part. But the model? All of the characters that have any purpose in the story just convienently knowing and using Japanese while living in New York? Get clue, and think about your writing. If you want to write a good story, leave out the contstant bits of Japanese, and stick to English. You will sound much more profesional if you stop and think about why they are using the language, where they would have learned it, and if it adds anything to the story if you do use it. If the answers to any of those questions is not clear, don't use the Japanese. |
 Chibis223 1/21/05 . chapter 4Ack! Bad Dee! Still, candy canes... yumm... Although that may not be the best way to go about tasting one. And basically pointing it out to Ryo none the less. Hmm... I can see this is about to get very interesting. More so than it already is... |
 Chibis223 1/21/05 . chapter 3Hah! It surprises me that RYO was the one who couldn't stay away... Nice job depicting the internal battle between his desires and his denial. I really like the way JJ is around Danny, it's like that is his true character. Not like the annoying, glomping one he is around Dee. Nice job! |
 Chibis223 1/21/05 . chapter 2Aww! That's so cute! Heh. Dee will never be able to stand not seeing Ryo for two whole days. |
 Chibis223 1/21/05 . chapter 1Pretty good! I like it enough to read the next chapters. I love the way you know how to use Japanese expressions, except... FAKE takes place in America. ^^; Good, tho. *applause* |
 Cheeseburger of Doom 12/19/03 . chapter 19This story is so involved..congrats on that, it's so hard to have really involved plots in fanfiction. I hope you're going to continue! |
 Cheeseburger of Doom 12/17/03 . chapter 2I don't have time to read more of this right now but I'm liking it so far, so I'll be back, I promise! |
 October Leaves 11/5/03 . chapter 6The fic rocks! |
 NickDWolfwood2 9/11/03 . chapter 19yo! i hope to read more sometime soon! like really soon! i want to find out what happens ok? so i best be seein' some new chapters aight? bai |
 NickDWolfwood2 9/10/03 . chapter 16don't u just hate it when people throw sunflowerseeds at you? lol anyways i like it so far it's really good and i hope to read more but my internet at home doesn't wokr for a few more adys so i can't read at home til then right now i'm at school. anywho i'll be back! |
 depressio 9/8/03 . chapter 19 i really like your story so far... its hecka tight, and funny! keep up the good work. i really don't have any sugestions since i'm sure you'll come up with something.
~Depressio~ O_o |
 depressio 9/8/03 . chapter 19 i really like your story so far... its hecka tight, and funny! keep up the good work. i really don't have any sugestions since i'm sure you'll come up with something.
~Depressio~ O_o |
 NickDWolfwood2 9/8/03 . chapter 7hola! well the bad part was i read until the part where Laura shot him and then i had to stop reading so it really sucked. but now that i've read it it's really good and i want to see whats going to happen! c ya round! |