i took the liberty of playing the beta reader and editing the grammar a bit on this story, i will send it to you from my listed e-mail address as an attatchment. please compare the two... your stories are wonderful but they seem rushed.

plz!1 update it is so wonderful!

YAY! its going to be a really good story, hope you update soon :)

i won't leave you alone till you update :P

I LOVE IT but how old is she lol that would be gross if she was 10 ew

it would be pot calling the kettle black

but i really think that you should include wider range of vocabulary and descriptive words. if not it would be rather plain...

good job though

n no offence coz as i said at the beginning of me review

it would be pot calling the kettle black

aw so cute love it please updater real soon^_^

Aww, I like this fic! It's really sweet!
love -little oro-

^_^ far out maybe you should concentrate on one certain fic so that your chapters and that fic will be of more quality...i read that in someones revie...=$ hehe... something like that i didnt copy it all... anyway... interesting...

umm.. let me say this frankfully.. i feel as if i had just read 3 whole chapters cramped into 1. its very not eyecatching and demons are NEVER nice to humans. potray battousai as dark and cold attitude, that'll be nicer.

plus its too short, very disheartening.

try readinf fics authored by Ravyn or Jane Drew. they are good writers

zackire

Hello, Stephanie-chan!
Hmm, this is an interesting beginning, however there were many grammatical errors and some spelling errors. I'm a bit confused though. So, Kaoru was possessed as a child and now she's not fully a mortal and Kenshin's a demon? Your summary however contradicts the 'Kaoru isn't fully mortal' you wrote in the chapter. Course, it could just be me. And I think things are going waay too fast. Seeing as Kenshin is Battousai, do you really think he'd have just given his name to her like that. Or would he say things-- okay, forget it, I'm too tired to write anymore, so I'll probably tell you anything else when you e-mail me back. Well, nice job! Update soon? :D
-meeh

I love the story! The plot is SO original! Please update, I want to read the rest! Besides I love Battousai/Kaoru Romance fan fictions!