You're way to strict w/ urself. I don't really count those as Plot Holes dude! Sigh.. this is sad... if you had continued, i wan to say i wan SasuXNaru! Bwaahahahaha!!

you rock

Naruto should be with Temari

Naruto should kick Saskue's **

I don't suppose you'd reconsider continuing? This is really good stuff, who cares if you got a few things wrong? Most people wouldn't notice, it could be your own twist on the Naruto reality. It's not really a big plothole, why end a good story?

If you're not going to continue maybe rewrite it? Please? I really enjoyed this fic. (Puppy dog eyes)

I don't really see how this has a ton of plot holes in it. it has less then the orginal show did! I wouldn't be surprised if you saw the orginal show and went "wait, this sucks! If i put this here and focus on that more, ad a bit more paint, and take away some orange! It'll be much better" and so you did and you fic is a testiment to that! Bunshin = genjutsu? no! that wouldn't work! because genjutsu's requite exelent control, and with only the leaf exercise for chakra control you couldn't expect everyone in the class to get it! so yes your story is not crappy at all! and if it is, then it's less crappy then the show! good job! although I can't find your first naruto story on this site...anyway your a great auther, no matter what you say! I hope whatever your third naruto is you post it soon! :)

can sasunaru work naruto is just so cute!

I like how you played this chapter out. Ya know, since Naruto actually lost against Sasuke. It's very realistic, since alot of stories show Naruto training for five seconds before he suddenly has the strength to own Orochimaru without Kyuubi or something. I'm sure the loss will teach him to think more, and that's great! Great story, I'm going to read the rest of the chapters now

May the force be with you

PS: I vote NaruTema. I've got no problems with Yaoi, but I generally dont read stories with Yaoi pairings.

What You aren't Updating? I enjoyed reading this story!

NaruTemari
NaruHina

WHY! WHO CARES ABOUT PLOT HOLES! FIX THEM! CONTINUE THE STORY! PLEASE! PRETTY PLEASE! WHY! WHY! WHY! WHY!

i'm glad you didn't take this down...i really enjoyed it and wish you would continue...who cares if it doesn't really have a plot...it is a good story and very well written...besides, this is when the genre PWP comes in...not all stories need a plot...just look at the matrix 2 (though truthfully, i've never seen that movie...i'm basing my opinon on rvb...)

It's a shame that you didn't continue the story, I enjoyed it.
And you're right. If all fanfictions stuck to the story line, it would be boring and it's much more interesting to read stories with the author's personal touch.
Good luck with any other fanfictions that you decide to write!

As little as my humble opinion matters I have to say that this is one of the best naruto-fics I have read thus far and I was really enjoying it. Shame you have decided not to continue it.

Harakudashi - what, not holy crap?! It should be Holy Crap. That's a great for a jutsu! I'm telling you! Heh, it would even be somewhat effective in combat. Perhaps not a rasengan or a chidori but i can't imagine that someone wants to be distracted by a sudden attack of explosive diarrhea in the middle of a fight. Ugh. The imagery though i could do without. Stupid imagination.