funnny and very well well written

it was a loo..ong time ago when you wrote this fic.

and i do not think you are going to read this review.

but i can not help congratulating you on accomplishing the feat of compressing into one long chapter a story that others might struggle to narrate in over ten.

u couldn't have broken it up into chapters could u? You just had to make it one big long freaken thing didn' you? o well, good fic tho. liked it a lot. well anyways, that's all from me

Cheers Ja ne

Okay dearie, let's get on to it: First off, you have bad punctuation when you write. It's VERY difficult to read and make out anything you're writing. Secondly, have you actually READ Dragonball? Vegeta is acting VERY MUCH out of charecter in this fic, and I don't think that's an accurate impression of him.

In conclusion, you need to work on this some more, perhaps even overhaul it. One writer in the Gatekeepers section began on a story, worked on two drafts of it, and then trashed it and redid everything because it SUCKED (And he wasn't afraid to admit it- even now he's in the process of overhauling yet AGAIN). In anycase, you need to make your fic more believable.

Creative and different from other fanfics I have read.I liked your character angel.

Me again. I liked this fic as a whole - save for one thing - it was a little to long for a one shot...other than that, its good.

Me again. I liked this fic as a whole - save for one thing - it was a little to long for a one shot...other than that, its good.

Kawaii. I like :).

I love this fic!

The story was way cool. I love it... great character development!

cute

Good job, nice character development. I really enjoyed this fic.

Loved it!

I really enjoy your stories. This is a great story, well written. Keep up the good work.