Now, I first want to state that I loved this story, and I know that this review can't possibly express just how much I enjoyed reading every chapter. (Now, not to sound pompous or anything but I rarely ever write reviews {mostly because I seem to make a fool of myself-- and I strongly dislike leaving: "Awws!" as reviews}, so this shows how wonderful I find your story right off the bat! *claps*) But I'm going to try~

Secondly I want to offer my sincerest condolences about your co-writer and yourself loosing contact (and while still writing this! So sad really...) but as 'Angharad23' has stated the story continued on seamlessly and wasn't a single hiccup through out the ending.

On to the review~ I found that the persona you've made for a 'darker Willy' is the best I've seen by far, most times I've noticed that everyone tries to hard to make him 'bipolar' as it would seem and the child-like appearance they try to hold onto for him unravels to his less then admirable side. Quite a conflicting and noticeable distraction. But not yours! He's quite clever and perfectly smooth and delicious like dark chocolate *giggles at the pun*

I will admit that I was a little concerned with the 'talking' pill bottles in the beginning of the story but you didn't really focus on them for very long so I needn't worry about that. Winona (W.I.N.O.N.A.) was a most interesting addition to the Chocolate Factory and I will admit I was half expecting a HAL (Space Odyssey 90) or PAT (Smart House) scenario in the making but I wasn't too terribly disappointed to see she almost did, but was horribly sad to see she, in a-round-a-bout way sacrificed herself, for Willy's sake in protecting Nadia. Very sad, but delightfully surprised to find her doing okay later on and her 'missing' Nadia too, so sweet!~ Oh God and Chauncey, he reminded me of Jack Sparrow stuck in a cat's body for some reason and I couldn't stop giggling at his 'conversing' with everyone.

I especially love Nadia, for an OC she's not horribly out of place, it's like she was meant to be there. Her entrance into Willy's world is most definitely original and completely amusing one I've ever seen *quirky grin* I also like her personality-wise as she's not so, so... overbearing! She's a strong-willed woman but she's still extremely fragile in her own ways~ and her not liking chocolate because it brings up bittersweet memories, very heart-wrenching, and I think maybe you could have possibly expanded on it? I dunno *shrugs*

Um, I noticed that the Oompa Loompas kind of... *trails off*... melted into the background after a while and started making tiny appearances as small groups-- it's not so important to the story but I do love the little devils so~

Ack! I almost forgot! *blushes horribly* I'm now going to point out my favorite chapters and lines: Firstly, I love the 'Little Willy' doll in Chapter 29, the rhymes were adorable and clever and oh-so very much Willy (the randomly added words by Lenny were cute) *grins bashfully* I felt like -I- was the one receiving the little doll and I realized that I want one of my very own so -very- badly~
-Next is Chapter 24 the very ending I could mentally picture the whole fight and was thoroughly amused that Willy was so agile and willing to 'bite the bullet' so to speak and actually give someone a wedgie, it had me in tears especially when he egged Carl on with the adorably cryptically (okay maybe not so cryptic~) perverted rhymes.
-And oh my God Chapter 6 where Nadia first hears the 'Candy' songs Willy listens to, I actually went and set it up so they were playing while I read to further my hysterics. I found Nadia to be cute in that later on she danced to them trying to not be concerned with the lyrics; so cute.
-And *laughs* then there's the entire chase scene in Chapter 21, god how I wish I could've been there to watch it unfold, it sounds downright amusing~

As for the end I was kinda hoping for Nadia to smoosh the wedding cake into Willy's face but the way it ended was sweet in it's own way too-- And I must admit to a growing curiosity about Charlie's little brother to be.

*Looks around* Well, I believe that is all I have to say on the matter~ I really enjoyed reading your story!

BEST fanfic i have EVER read!
plot was perfect, characters perfect an i loved the twist on Wonka!
absolute perfection!

Sometimes I wish that people like you could just continue writing forever, and ever, and ever. This story was so gosh darn good that I read it while I was supposed to be studying for my final exams. Please, please, please write an epilouge like you promised.

I really like your character of Willy Wonka and Nadia. Wonka is such an eccentric character that sometimes, I find that stories don't really do him justice, but you've put a new and refreshing twist on him. I really also like Nadia, with her lively personality and her way of dealing with Wonka, very good job done there. In regards to Charlie, I have to say that I adore him, and all the other Buckets. I also like how you've given the Oompa Loompas their own characters, as opposed to a collective mass.

Your plot line was also exceedingly interesting. From going before to after the Golden Ticket contest was a great idea because you were able to also incorporate so much more into the story.

Another thing that I really like about your story is your OCs. They've all been so well characterised that I can really relate to them, as an actual person on their own inside a wonderfully constructed world.

I also love the lyrics that you've composed, both the Oompa Loompas song as they were wheeling Gloria to her doom (what happened to her in the end anyway?) and Sweetoof's song as well. That final bit was done beautifully, the way everything just came together in that song.

SO, my final words shall be: Kudos to you on writing such an amazing story and I look forward to reading more things from you.

Until next time
-Ybs

Lovely, very well written beautiful story. I loved it.

DUH. Can I cry?

(Honestly... This-is-the-best-story-I've-read. EVER.)

WOW. This has got to be one of the best fanfics here on . Your writing style is absolutely amazing and the plot is wonderfully executed. I love how detailed you get with each character and how well you develope their personalities, especially Willy's and Nadia's. I patiently wait for the epilouge and hope to see more wonderful works in the future. Great job! :D

This is one of the greatest stories I have ever read, in print and on the web, fanfiction and "serious" fiction .. however one chooses to define it. You too are *geniuses*--and even more than that, you have managed to channel the most beautiful whimsy and imagination into this story while inventing the most perfectly written non-annoying and incredibly endearing OC's in a fanfiction that I have EVER seen.

I've recommended this story to a friend who is a talented writer herself who has never even seen either of the movies, read the books, etc., and she *adored* the entire story--couldn't stop reading it. So there :-)

I was so sorry to hear about the loss of the other author .. whichever one of you I am talking to. But the last chapters of this story are exquisite, and whatever the author situation the story has only ended on the highest, best note. I can't wait to go back and immerse myself in the whole thing once again!

I also just now noticed that you actually have *another* story written, so I'm heading over RIGHT NOW to read that. I'm so happy you're writing!

(Oh, and I would love to read an epilogue if you ever should write one, but the story is complete and that makes me happier than I can ever express)

Well done.

Ok, I needed some time--ya see I read this at night, and was to dizzy from sleep to properly leave a review. Now this is THE best story I've read EVER. Now let me shear some history with you, I've started reading stories online since I was ten, the first story was a SesshoumaruXOc (I don't know if you know who that is) it was great but lacked plot and very marysue-ish. However I loved it, because it was my first story. Many marysue stories later, I encountered a fantastic fanfic in the Invader Zim section-that changed my life, it was so very well thought out--something the old stories I've read didn't have, but it was a little OOC. Thus evolving me into a new person, now 'Rome and Juliet' type stories was no longer a heart wrenching drama, but a very cliche pop up book.

Now many-non poorly plotted- marysue stories later, I ran into a story sectioned in Nightmare before Christmas. THAT was nicely written, had a strong hold plot, and a very unique Oc. Now this author pulled strings on me that I didn't even know was attached, you see (and I hope this doesn't single her out) the story was OogieXOc, which there's not many of here on . I thought a romance with him was very odd; I actually went to read it for kicks, to laugh at such a far fetch romance. let me just tell you, I've never thought I would find Oogie to be so... sexy, no she didn't change his appearance, and try to make him look more attractive, no, it was his personality (now before I get into that, I LOVE villains, bad boys if you will) and she had him so down to the 'T' that I developed an attraction to him (crazy- no, CrAzY- yes) once I've read her story, I felt I couldn't stand ANYTHING that had a OOC in it, if one thing happen that I couldn't see that character doing, I'd quickly click 'back' button.

Now many-- non poorly plotted, non marysue, non OOC stories later, I fell back into the SesshoumaruXOc(him being my fav character, but no one new how to keep him IC) I found a story of him that was very curious. It was split into many seasons; the first season didn't even have him in there, just a few glimpse of him-- not bad but strange. Now I'm one for romance, and the first season didn't have ANY, but yet she was able to keep me interested. Now the morel in this one is that, her story did have all three thing (Good plot, no marysue, and completely IC) , but it was VERY well written, she'd make a long story feel short, and a short story fell long-- all in the good way-- Now I'm not strict on this one, I'm not that anal on properly written stories, don't get me wrong, 'Luk n @ worde's lik dees' hurt my eyes, but I wont curse them on it.

Now, this is your review box, and I think its time to move onto you and your partner story--first off, I think you did a fantastic job on these last two chapter. If I hadn't read your author note about the lost connection, I would have thought the two of you were still together on the fic. I did not notice any change in the last two chapters so I assumed you both clearly thought of what you wanted, how you wanted it and where it was going to go. This story was amazing, and like the four I've named up there, it has changed my life. You story does indeed have all three things (Good plot, no marysue, and completely IC) and the fourth one (Perfectly written).

The life changing symbol in your story I would say is all of the above, you plot-oh don't get me started- (Spoiler for anyone reading this) Willy Wonka OWES her job to avoid inspectors, Cevil sends her to WW factory to embarrass her on not being able to close it down, Willy accepts to see if he had the potential to get inspected, heart broken thinking that he didn't (because of Cevil) Nadia falling in love with him but being rejected because of Willy's fear of love- but thinking its because he wants children(something she cant give) and sending her home only to want her back, realizing his mistake, and learning that she think he rejected her for being infertile. ALSO (suck in big breath) She hates chocolate because her mother love and makes it and when she died of diabetes (*inferring* was either born of it or grew into it and most likely ignored her health and kept eating chocolate until she had a sugar induce stroke, thus killing her) mother give her three beans, saying their magic, first one don't grow, years later second one don't grow- at this point done with magic and chocolate altogether- Willy learns and try to change her mind on chocolate, making love and proposing to her in between... or... some where.

And (inhale) Looking for Cevil to teach her a lesson, finding her by doing a public scandal of kissing and proposing to his former inspector, so she could show to her boss how 'scandalous' Nadia is, so the can black list her from the world. Willy then let it be known his devious plan from there. (End of your story spoiler) But I'm sure you know this because you’re the author. I don't think I have to explain how good that plot was... oh wait, I did. Ok now on to your character(s) very well thought out, fits in to this story very nicely. Willy, he was indeed IC, I find cold Willy very sexy (See above). I think you two really did your research on him.

The truly only problem I had with this fic (which isn't very bad) was that you made it seem like Willy didn't know who he gave his tickets to. Willy did know who got the golden tickets, he sent it to them purposefully (Message me and I'll tell you my reasons why--I plan to make a story of it) The only two Willy did not know of was Mike and Charlie-- Mike because he hacked into it and Charlie because he wasn't supposed to have the money to buy it. You see and I quote "You, you're Mike Teavee. You're the little devil who cracked the system."- Willy wasn't happy that he didn't get the real fourth ticket winner because of him. And "And you, well, you're just lucky to be here, aren't you?"- Quit surprised that this kid had the money to get the ticket that he has been saving for someone else.

I think that wraps up this extremely long review-- and no, (not to sound rude) I didn't write this long review to impress you, I wrote it because you deserve it, both of you. And like I put in all my reviews, I am not a goddess of story reading, my review is just as important and just as insignificant as someone just writing 'Eh, nice story'. I do hope you read my history of how I developed in story reading, and take that I wrote it to give my thanks to YOU, not to seem as if I am some kind of experience critic that just gain more experience from reading your story. And again, I am not claiming to be a 'story reading goddess' just a person who enjoys the thrill she gets when she reads a good story.

Such an amazing story!

Absolutely wonderful. This has honestly been the best read I have had in a very long time. I laughed, teared up, screamed at ny computer and read half of this under the cover of darkness. It is a lovely, well thought out story that has truly impressed me and given me a whole new outlook on Willy Wonka. I also love how you incorporated Nadia into the story. Normally, I hate it when authors put in made up characters that have nothing to do with the story but you have completely changed my mind. Continue to the excellent work, I am anxiously awaiting the epilogue.

That was one of the most beautifully written fics evah! You get what i'm laying down? I just don't like romance, but this was groovy!

This is an awesome story. However, there is one thing that still needs to be explained. How does a virgin know that she can not have kids? I think she should have a surprise baby any ways and chalk it up that the chocolate wedding cake got her that way... LOL. Thanks for taking the time to write for us readers. I love it when authors really commit to a story. I do hope to be reading more Charlie and the Chocolate Factory romance stories.

...That was wonderful!

AW!

Well done you!