Mhrmm... Very much like the book... The author is very repetive, so I think you nailed it ^^ Great job

wonderful =]
captured tyler's movements and personality wonderfully.

Very much in the style of the movie.
Good job.
Liked the ending.

It's good, Tyler's in character, as is the narrator. You could add to it, theoretically. It's good as is though...
-Lorn

It is a little repetative, but it's written in a very similar style to the movie (I think). I like the ending VERY much

Not bad of a sotry, actually. Hopefully you'll have the guts to write another one, eh? XD

I usually hate the "in the present" (as opposed to past tense narrative) that many fan fict writers use, but it so works for Fight Club because it's very Palahniuk-esque. A couple parts were wordly awkwardly, but otherwise I enjoyed this. Keep writing fan fiction, def.!

That was brilliant. Very sexy too. Fantastically written and close to the book. Nice job!

I AM IN LOVE WITH THIS STORY!
lol sorry for the caps, but this was very well written. The emontions of Jack and Tyler are the same as if they were acutally in the movie. I also love the "I am Jack's..." you wrote those very well!

*Stands and applauds*
BRAVO

VERY good (and hot).

Pretty damn good.

It's de ja vu all over again. You did good. The movie is repetitive so it fits with the fic. I wonder if Brad Pitt knows about all the gay-subtext in his films but this fic really does fit in well with the film. Keep up the good work.

Awesome! This is just so brilliant.

This was really awesome, and it did have a semblance to the book, I really liked the duality theme, this was really good.

You managed to capture the mood of the movie perfectly. And kudos for the awesome first line. Well done.