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Black Robed One 2006-04-25 ch 2,	abuseA very good chapter, even though it was very sad too. Sakura and Sasuke’s moments together were absolutely adorable, which, however, only made this chapter’s ending all the more sad. Well, I will be looking forward to future chapters, although I will definitely miss Sakura and Sasuke’s being together… In regard of combat scenes, I don’t see any real problem with them. True, Sakura’s fights weren’t particularly descriptive, but I have a feeling that they weren’t supposed to: after all, these were just faceless and nameless ninja Sakura fought. Still it might be nice if you described what her Genjutsu did, not just what effect (or lack of such, in case of second fight) they had. The only semi-criticism I have concerns: “She stared at her opponent for a long minute, contemplating what kind of attack she should use.” In my experience, mass combats with dozen of more combatants on each side are very rushed (and I participated in my share of mass combats back when I was practicing swordsmanship), and you have very little time to think; for not only more of your allies may fall with each moment you hesitate, but also more enemies may come to engage you. Therefore, I very much doubt that Sakura think about what attack she should use for entire minute (unless she was absolutely sure her side had the upper hand, but I doubt that was the case).
2006-04-01 ch 2, anon.	abuseThis story is so well written! I almost cried reading it! What's going to happen now? Please keep updating, this is so good
Black Robed One 2006-02-19 ch 1,	abuseI liked your story so far, and it has great promise too (I just can’t help wondering how it will correspond with “In My Life” song, one of my favorite of the Beatles’ songs, by the way). Hopefully, you’ll continue writing this story of yours sooner or later. P.S. I am not 100% certain, but I believe Sasuke was 5 when Itachi slaughtered the Uchiha clan.
SmkyRngr1986 2006-02-15 ch 1,	abuseI think I like where this is going. (Sasuke-teme better not break her heart again.) -.-' Sorry. I've got a hopelessly romantic demon sealed inside me. Likes to express himself every so often. Btw, I've finally got the first of my poems up. I'd like to know what you think.
livi510 2006-01-01 ch 1,	abuseItachi and Sasuke? That would be bad, if they met.
hujin 2005-08-16 ch 1,	abuseI love the depiction of Sasuke's thoughts, although you should consider breaking some of the longer paragraphs up. But although the writing was good, I didn't see any plot in this chapter, just a reiteration of Sasuke's feelings on the night he left and most of them aren't original, fresh ideas. Still, it's good and I'm really looking forward to the second chapter. BTW, I think you should use the first summary.

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