I love this story! b.t.w. juuichi juuni juusan (11 12 13 in Japanese)

omg i love this story! although i find ghost stories from Japan to be extremly creppy i really liked this one! So glad to read something so original and something i could actually see in a hellboy comic! Good Job!

Dude.
AWESOME twisting of a classic tale.

...That was amazing. I was at the edge of my seat!

This is what I don't get. A lot of restless ghosts are just hanging around because they've got unfinished things to attend to. If it was as simple as just shouting TWELVE as you are passing by when she reached eleven, WHY DIDN'T SOMEONE THINK OF IT BEFORE?!?!?!?! The human race as a whole is stupid. I like the fact that the kid won't leave HB alone. That's just hilarious!! I can picture him trying to get away while still being nice, with the kid wanting him to play with the dolls with her. That would be good.

That kept me on the edge of my seat literaly. I loved the suspence! Please write more thanks!

I've actually read the original story (and told it to a guide during a ghost tour in Savannah). You did an excellent job with the story, I liked how Rumiko was so much like a real kid.

Bh:Not much time to review (family apparently expects their anti-social fangirl writer to have dinner with them...) but I had to say that I love this story. My Lit teacher showed this legend to me right before school got out and I love it.

This is one of the best HellBoy stories i've ever seen so far, and i really really love it!

Hello there,

Hi, I read your story and I must say this is the best Hellboy story I've read so far, I like how you based this short story on a real legend and combined it with a story and style of today we've all come to know and love. It was suspenceful, well written and had it's funny points. I espeacially liked the action, that was the best part, the cream inside the chocolate egg.

Bravo! Keep up the good work, I hope to see more from you.

-Michael Alastair

P.S.: Maybe your not a fan of Naruto, but please, if you have time, please read and review my story "Ninja Night" I would appriciate it. thanks!

Another wonderful story. I certainly hope you write more.

Just one quibble: black and white Poloroids are a pain to work with and wouldn't make very good forensic pictures. Not to metion that the cameras needed are bulky and again a pain to work with. If pictures were taken, they would more than likely be taken with 35mm black and white film using a SLR (Single Lens Reflex) camera. You get much better detail with film.

Nice chunk of fiction. It's a real treat to read Hellboy fanfic that doesn't involve "a new girl at the BPRD with occult powers". Very well-written, true to the whole "Hellboy" universe. Please write more stories! :)

Nice adaptation. Very Mignola, and the writing was good, too.

Wonderful story. I love your take on Hellboy's character. Did you base any of this on the Hellboy comic "Heads", which Mignola also based on a Japanese legend? If you did not, you certain evoke a lot of the same spirit that Mignola caught in that.

A few tiny quibbles. Some odd typos here and there, but certainly not enough to detract from the story. However, I'm really curious about this statement: "this is a spectator I’ve never dealt with before". What did you mean by 'spectator'? I only know of the term 'spectator' as 'one who watches something' as in a sports spectator. Or was Hellboy making a pun on Janice's word 'specter'?

Also, a small pet peeve of mine, author's asides such as your citing "Chained Coffin, etc." for Baba Yaga should be relegated to a footnote at the end. Sticking it into the text, especially at such a high-tension moment, kind of interrupts the wonderful effect you were buiding up.

(And a wonderful effect it was too. All too often people who write Hellboy fanfics make Hellboy so invulnerable as to be boring. In my mind a hero who can never be injured or threated with death really cannot be praised for being brave either. Your writing at that point had such a great emotional build up it was just a little jarring to have it interrupted with a bibliographical citation.)

Oh, by the way, I loved HB's chicory coffee, bifocals, and Holy Water squirt gun. Really, really funny.

Wonderful effort all the way around. Thanks for posting. Beth Palladino

Another great story!