hey!cool!really good!sorry, i rely mean it, im juz not very original. but werez the nex chap?i no they take time, but its been so long i forgot about this story!pleez update soon!!

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...I'm impressed. No, seriously, I AM impressed. I have read very few fics that starred OCs and still maintained high quality. I would write a longer review, but I want to get back to reading your fic.

At LAST - an update. All that pestering finally paid off...

TYPOS?! WHY?! This is AFTER I offered to proofread your stuff - Not just Digital War. Ah Well.

Otherwise, a good continuation of the story. Would like to see more.

And, in terms of the "DedicationWar", this brings the score to:
"Trinity Dragon 3, INSDragonclaw/Girgash 2."
Heheh. Wait and see...

Nice chapter.

Me.

Very good. Where's the next one?

It's me ^_^

“If have anything you wanted, what would it be?”
“If (?) have anything you wanted, what would it be?”

Once again, a pothole. I get the idea that you work at high speed when you type. It helps to plan your chapters, and type SLOWLY.

Till next time
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Okay:
Good structure
Even character alternation
Good storyline
VERY good "merging" idea. Could lead to a few ... complications, down the line -_^.

Bad:
Few typos, nothing exceptional
You forget to put Question Marks at the end of most of your questions. Unless, naturally, you're trying to make a statement, but often times the context is wrong.

Keep Going...

This is a quite entertaining story in my opinion, although at first I was put off the by the fact that the Digimon have human names, but fortunately I've gotten the hang of it and am now able to understand the story better.

However what I really like in your story is the fact that each character has his/her own distinguishable character, which makes it easy for the readers to identify with them. I feel sympathy for Michel.

I look forward for your update. Until then.

It was pretty good, but I was a bit annoyed during the first half when the dialogue was written in italics.

Keep going! ^__^

Pretty good so far, you might want to add a little more detail in the story, but it's cool. Keep it up!

I've just finished reading the first 5 chapters of your story. It's a hell of a story and you seem to be progressing excellently,. You've combined agnst, wonder and danger well, but I can see one problem. You haven't given any thought to how the reader "sees" you story in their mind's eye. Background description as well as Character description could bring out the parts of the story that throw your characters on a BLACK background. It may sound harsh, but this is elemental to the story. It's simple really, describe what YOU see in the background, Marcus, Patrick, and Mason are in a jailcell, tell us what they see, describe their emotions, with death looming near, how do they feel? This could bring a simple story to novel standards and a pat on the back for a job well done. If you should need a proof-reader/spellchecker/grammar correction, feel free to E-mail me, or catch me on Yahoo Messenger by the same screen name. ;-) I also do editing for 2 other authors and helped to improve their work conciderablly and would enjoy working with you as well.

Your Fellow Author,
SaberGatomon

Awesome job on this new chapter. I have a feeling that this is going to turn into one of those highly original story series, which it already is, and it's a welcomed originality too. I really liked that one line:

“Twice, and sold the Machinedramon who punched out Eric. Congratulations.”

Sounds like it must be a regular thing there. That got a big laugh out of me. Nothing I can see wrong from my initial look. I'm definitely keeping my eye sharply focused on this series, so keep it coming!

This is a good story, really different. *Puts Goverment Confines in favorites*

Seemed to go by a little more quickly than the first half, but still good.

"The second half of Government Confines is completed."
Does that mean you won't be doing any more of it? Come on, don't leave me hangin'.

Looks good so far. "Becoming one”, that can lead to a lot of things, but sounds like it's going on to a very interesting process to see how that happens. I like the idea of a repressive government in a Digimon story, that's an idea I haven't seen addressed if at all in Digimon, and it's a welcome one. No typos that I saw right off the bat. Wonder what the flash is. As always, can't wait for the next part!