Reviews for Pain, tears and lies

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Dutchygirl 2008-07-23 ch 45,	abuseLol... let me surprise you again ;) Not as fast as last time, but faster than usual. Last time was the longest review I've ever written. I didn't know I even get censored now when I review, but oh well, guess I have to start watch what I'm saying now... for a bit. Prue explained why she accepted Cole so fast. Wow you actually listen to what I say? lol. I like the explanation, that she wanted to make it easier for Phoebe now they've had been through such a hard time. But Prue finally accepted Cole as part of their family, as I can see a bit in the parts you wrote about a year and 10 months from now. So many funerals. Many people died in this story. I thought Darryl was the saddest one, but the other speeches were well written too. The one with Phoebe's baby was the most dramatic. I didn't know Paige hated Andy so much to say that death was too good for him. That was a bit harsh since I've thought she barely knew him. I loved the conversation between Kurt and Paige. That he decided not to tell anyone about Paige's secret. I don't know why actually... maybe because it was so mysterious. Prue did end up with Kurt. That's good she found another love after Andy. The jumping in time was good. They seemed to have established a happy life together as one big family. The funny part with Penny was a good variation from all the action and drama in your story. The last part of the chapter was suspenseful. Victor suddenly appearing and Kurt finally telling the secret of Paige. Victor was really mean to Phoebe, calling her weak.And Victor was the one harming the people to frame Leo. That was a shock. How is everyone going to react to all this? And is Kurt going to die or is it someone else? I want to know, so update! lol Also I advise you to write 'and' instead of '&', because you did that a lot in this chapter and it's more msn language than to put in a story. Uhm... I don't know about the quote. I'm pretty bad with memorizing what they exactly said on the show, but it was a part of Phoebe moving out maybe? Since there was this one episode where Piper and Leo wanted to move out and there was a whole discussion about it. And Phoebe moved out the house to with Cole, but I don't think it was discussed so much then. Well, tell me in the next chapter.
jiejei1 2008-07-23 ch 45,	abuseOk, so I tried to review yesterday when I first read this, but my computer wouldn't let me. So all the comments I was going to write I completely forgot, cause thats just how I am. Anyway, about this chapter, all I can say is "WHOA". So much happened that like omg!! I knew Paige was for SAS, now I want to know the rest of her secret. And Piper shooting Victor, that was unexpected. I want to know where she got the gun from, and who shot Curt. Can't wait for the next chapter!! More please
lizardmomma 2008-07-22 ch 45,	abusevery good job
lizardmomma 2008-07-17 ch 44,	abusevery good job
Dutchygirl 2008-07-17 ch 44,	abuseEey! Didn't think I would review that fast huh? :P Well... it's vacation! makes me happy :) And this chapter was almost all about Cole and Phoebe. I loved it. I think this is one of my favorite chapters of the whole story. :) You really know how to describe drama and painful situations. I like how you told Cole's past. I just adore flashbacks! You're very creative how you put all the characters from Charmed into a world without any powers (yea I know that world is called earth) and they still stay in character, like Gideon still being an evil teacher, but now in other evil. I thought it was very realistic how Aaron and Cole suffered from Gideons doings and the impact it had on both of them, which made them choose unsatisfying lives. Cole got so frustrated he shot Gideon. He grew up from a scared little boy to a grown up man finally being able to stand up for himself. I liked that you added that female teacher in it. The words she said were fitting. But even now she doesn't say anything about the incident... the police never investigated and found out it was Cole? Well I guess not, the police is never clever in charmed XD And Aaron turned into a ... can't think of a nicer word at the moment. That was very in character I thought, for someone who has been sexually abused to become that, because he doesn't know any better. And it was explained when Cole started to use drugs. And Andy was a client of Aaron? I didn't see that one coming. That was a surprizing and good twist. Aw... Phoebe forgave Coole and they're getting married? I thought that was a very sweet moment. Prue seemed a bit out of character accepting Cole fast, but maybe that was because she never did that in Charmed. But actually I always hated Prue when she was always so distrusting of Cole. So I thought this acceptance of Prue was much better. Should have been in the show too. I think Prue was talking about Kurt, because I can't think of anyone else in this story she could fall in love with suddenly, but you know how to make twists, so anything could happen there. :D Andy in prison, that's ok. Guess he deserved that. Cheryl died, yea she became a main character. It was sad for kurt, because he cared very much about her. Paige has a dark side? I like that twist. She might kill them all? You said all the secrets were revealed, but hers isn't. What has she got to do with SAS and what is she planning? And why does she suddenly call Prue a ? I'm really confused XD So many chapters and still you keep us in suspense who will have the big death... I actually thought when I start reading this story the deah would have been at the beginning, but it obviously wasn't lol. Only 6 more chapters? I'm sad and happy at the same time it's ending. Sad, because then I won't have anything to read anymore and happy, because I know all the secrets and how it will end. There are so many writers here who never finish their story, (uhm... yeah, stop looking at me... I finished 6 out of 8!)so I'm happy you will write a good ending to this story. Well I won't keep you up any longer reading this, because you need to continue writing :P Till next chapter.
jiejei1 2008-07-16 ch 44,	abuseFirst off, welcome back. I was wondering if you were ever going to finish this story. I'm glad to see you are. Secondly, Cole's story was heart-wrenching. so sad. I'm glad to see Andy got what he deserved though. But now I want to know what Paige's secret is, and who that old woma with Piper is...Can't wait for the next chapter!!
Dutchygirl 2008-06-08 ch 43,	abuseEey, srry for not reviewing so long. You know you don't have to wait for me to update. I review every chapter anyway. I liked the beginning of the chapter with Patty. Even though she wasn't always on the show, she does mean a lot to her daughters. It's cool how she has come to all her three daughters to save them, makes the story still a bit supernatural :) And all three of them really needed some encouraging words from their mother, it's good she came to help them. Nice that Cole wanted to dive in the water, but not really smart aftre thge water explodes. It's good prue and Phoebe made it out of the water okay. Too bad Phoebe lost a baby, but if you look at all the circumstances and stress she has been through it's actually amazing the other child is still alive. It was fun to see Piper meet a future form of herself. She must have bene very surprised. A huge loss will come? That can't be good. Wow, Victor got kicked out of the hospital by Prue. I can't believe they just let him go like that and didn't ask him for his reasons for his actions. I would have want to know if I were them. Victor is free, he won't be up to any good. Cole's a druggie? I guess it was easy for him to get addicted since his awful past. But he's still an addict now? And how did Andy find out Cole's secret? I hope he will be okay. Write more soon... can;t believe the endig is so colse already :S
jiejei1 2008-05-28 ch 43,	abuseFinally! I fianally got through all 43 chapters, and let me say, you have yoursefl an excellent story. i hope you continue with it. i would love to see how it ends.
lizardmomma 2008-05-05 ch 43,	abusevery good job
Dutchygirl 2008-04-12 ch 42,	abuseEey sorry, I'm still veyr busy. So let's review fast... wow, a lot of action in this chapter. The co-operation between Paige, Victor, Kurt and Cheryl seemed very unorganised. They were more busy talking then to have a plan or a strategy or anything. Well... guess they aren't really used being together, but still they should try to come up with a plan before doing anything stupid and getting killed. The news of Victor's betrayal really hurt Piper and Leo. They both don't really know what to do with the situation. It's good they can find comfort in each other. Good thing Prue, Cole and Andy were able to cut down the tires. Kind of bad Phoebe is now in the car in the sea. I thought it a bit weird Cole was just standing there and doing nothing... but okay. The flashbacks were a bit too short, since you said it was her life flashing by. In the second one it was Phoebe thinking she was pregnant of Cole before all the disaster with the SAS happened? I hope Phoebe will be rescued by Prue in time. I have no idea about this Frankie chick lol. But you will probably have a good twist figured out for that. It must be complicated. I'm not even going to try guessing lol. Well, keep writing as usual and the story is going to have a great ending in these last chapters, I'm sure of it. :)
lizardmomma 2008-02-27 ch 42,	abusevery good job
Dutchygirl 2008-02-26 ch 41,	abuseEey here I come to review. I'm busy with college at the moment, exams, papers and debates I have to prepare, so I won't have that much time to review. Thank you for answering my questions lol. I was really confused about kurt and Cheryl, but I guess Cheryl was too. :D So Kurt is really going for Prue now? that's an interesting sideline in this story. Ah... I knew Piper and Leo would get involved in all the action too. The SAS came crashing in the manor. And they told everything about what happened. That means they want to kill Piper and Leo now? Or do they have other plans? A lot of action for the gang trying to save Phoebe. I hope they are going to be okay. And teh situation of Victor etc is very dangerous. I gtg now... good chapter, I want to know what happens next, so keep writing.
lizardmomma 2008-02-25 ch 41,	abusevery good job, I like how you have been wrtiting this, just giving us enough of a bite of cake to tempt us to want the whole piece
Dutchygirl 2008-02-16 ch 40,	abuseEey... here I stop by again. Chapter 40 already, it's going fast now. Only 10 more. So the photo turned out be of Cole all a long. Too bad you can't put pictures in the story ;) lol. And that's how Prue knew about Andy and Cole together. I wonder why she hadn't talked to Phoebe about it then since she always wants to protects her sisters, but maybe she didn't wnat to hurt her sister. But it explains why Prue doesn't like Cole at all in this story. I can't believe Andy has been so mean. How the hell can he blame it all on Prue when he has been the one lying to her. And then calling her names and saying she never can find love. Why did he even start to date her in the first place? Because he's obviously not in love with her. Why did he even propose to her?He treated her horribly. It's kind of weird Andy confesses about Piper in front of everyone in the manor. That is akward. And no one reacts to that. it must be sad for Andy to find out Darryl is dead. They worked closely together as policemen. It is a lot of info for Prue and Piper to take at once. About Micheal rebuilding the SAS and kidnapping Phoebe. So Kurt and Prue are going to be a couple now? What about Cheryl> Doesn't Kurt like Cheryl anymore? Piper and Leo have to rest at home? So they aren't going to be included in the fight at all? I bet they will somehow get involved too and have to go help the rest even in an unhealthy state. Micheal is informed fastly about Prue and the otehr coming after them. The SAS are good spies. I wonder where Micheal will go too now. Will he go and fight against them or will he try to run away? Well, continue, continue, continue! I'll be there for chapter 41!
lizardmomma 2008-02-11 ch 40,	abusevery good job, looking forward to the next chapter

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