 Light Shadow Angel 2006-05-30 . chapter 1There were some mistakes...
Beast Boy woke up early one morning to find that no-(Don't use one there)one was in the common room. (Comma) "They must all be sleeping in,(Period)" He said to himself as he began to make tofu waffles for himself(Read that sentence. I would take out himself the second time).(This is far too rushed and the whole chapter is too short.) A few hours later, Beast Boy noticed that there was still no(No line!)-one there. He decided to check their rooms.
I decide just to proof read that paragraph. Otherwise, this is a good story!
K.U.T.G.W,
Milez |