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Light Shadow Angel
2006-05-30 . chapter 1
There were some mistakes...

Beast Boy woke up early one morning to find that no-(Don't use one there)one was in the common room. (Comma) "They must all be sleeping in,(Period)" He said to himself as he began to make tofu waffles for himself(Read that sentence. I would take out himself the second time).(This is far too rushed and the whole chapter is too short.) A few hours later, Beast Boy noticed that there was still no(No line!)-one there. He decided to check their rooms.

I decide just to proof read that paragraph. Otherwise, this is a good story!

K.U.T.G.W,
Milez
Ryo-ohki the great
2005-08-18 . chapter 3
Aw!Poor Beastboy...Its okay Beastboy!I still love you!!

...So I have Issues,okay!?

That was so cute!First,here comes BB to save the day!And then it was a dream.XD They're so mean!It was so cute!
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