good, i like how they are getting longer, now there is more action and information in them

Every thing is good, it is just that the chapters are kind of short. I am not saying that they are bad, just short, but they are good.

good start so far. i loved both of the movies, and now that they are combined, it is going to be one heck of a ride!

Okay; I think this is good. Just a few points thought...

1 - everything is going a bit too fast. the actions that you describe is a bit forced. for example - "He went into the room and sat down at a desk." it give the barest of facts. What I would like to know is what does the room look like?

You don't need to put in loads of detail just a bit would do.

Example - Mort walked into the sitting room; the sun shonw through the bay windows, forcing the gloom before it to flee. He made his way over the desk, by passing the mess upon the floor. He looked Shooter's note over before he sat down at his desk and took out his note book...

Like I said, you need a bit more detail in here. Otherwise I do think this is very well written and that you have a good grasp on the English Language.

ta,

Poppy

P.S. I shall review more later!

Okay, this is funny too! these lines I honestly can't see Mort Rainy saying as Dean Corso! oh my gosh! it puts me into giggles every time!

Oh! plot is thickening!

Hahahaha! this was so funny! I'm sorry, you probably didn't intend for me to laugh. But I just thought it was the funniest thing in the world!

I am glad that I read on to see Shooter come about. Looks like Mort/Dean is getting CRAZY!

I think, that since chapter 7 was so short, you should just combine that with this one and make that a compelte chapter. It happens in the same scene and I think it would just make things flow better.

Otherwise, good work!

Ugh, I hate Liana! even in the movie she seemed so snobish to me! I think you got her character down.

good job!

Just a question, will Shooter be appearing? since it's finished I guess I'll just have to read on, now won't I?

Good novelization once again. but could have been combined with chapter 3. But this good. I do like this. I can't wait to see about the plot.

Good novelization of this scene in Nine Gates. I liked it.

Okay, short chapter, but that's all right. Actually, chaps 1 and 2 could have been combined. But this is interesting.

This was an interesting begnning. I liked it!